这篇文章day 167 读后续写- 攀援而上，滚滚而下（24年四川开学联考）最让我纠结的是结尾。
因为主角伤势比较重，所以到第二段等待他的，只能是被别人救援。但这样结尾，就显得主角的精神力很单薄，这次冒险也显得有一丝不自量力的可笑，尤其是在主角的brother知难而退的对比下。
写到最后一句的时候，我突然想起了《徒手攀岩》和《登山家》两部电影，我意识到，可能，也许，有的人在受伤之后，也是不甘罢手，不愿放弃的。
所以，我在结尾又用括号接了一句。
写完之后，我突然又笑了，想起李宗盛的《山丘》，“不自量力地还手，直至死方休。”
到底怎样的结尾才不可笑？可笑不可笑又是否重要？
下面我就把我的尝试分享出来。
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下面是我的续写尝试
Para 1: Fighting my unsteady vision, I pulled out my phone, only to find there was no service.
I gripped the dirt-covered device tightly, hoping that a signal might miraculously appear. However, the heat from the approaching sun, the tall, unforgiving canyon walls and the shooting pain from my ankle mocked against my naivety. I was, unequivocally and desperately, alone. Even the sound of the river below taunted me. So close yet out of reach! I shut my eyes for a moment, trying to block the throbbing pain from my forehead. Then, inch by inch, I started crawling towards my lifeline, the bag.
Para 2: It had been about 2 hours since my fall when I heard the sound of several people.
Hidden under the rocky slope, I feared them passing me by without a second glance, so gathering what little strength I had left, I called out, my voice hoarse and broken. Just as despair edged in again, their laughter transformed into concern, "Hello? Is anyone down there?" I managed a weak response, “Down here! I need help!” Moments later, a group of hikers broke through the scrub brush at the edge of the rocky slope. Instantly, I felt my pain weaning and fear wincing. I knew, that was the true power of hope. (Then, taking one final look at the river, I also knew that I would be back.)
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