这篇续写是昨天晚自习时间写的。
一开始，自己写的比较细。
比如第一段，为什么要同时使用哨子和手电筒，写了单独勺子的声音可能在山谷间回荡，无法提供准确的位置参考。但叠加手电筒，则能提供双重保险。又如二段，在听到呼救声后，我做了欲扬先抑，Dave停下一些去倾听的时候脚步声又突然消失，然后我先写了Dave的心理活动，“这是我的幻觉吗？还是说没有了我的哨声和手电作指引，Ben又迷失方向了呢？”
这样的细节让故事更有合理性和沉浸感，但囿于词数，在修改的时候都删掉了。
结尾部分这次写的也比较纠结。
其实如果是套之前我写过的结尾，Day 71 读后续写- 希望是一条银色的丝带，那功夫就省了很多，甚至连人物结尾的动作都不用改。但这样就不符合自己的写作想法。所以到结尾处还是想了很多。
原来我想的是，伴随着Dave和Ben向洞穴前进，用夜晚的天象叠加人物的处境，我还想好了用哪个双关的词。
但最后，我还是敲定了第三个结尾。
下面我就把我的尝试分享给大家，另外两种结尾，我会附在文末。如你尚未读过题目day 198 读后续写- 夜深骤雨，水漫青山，可以先读，自行揣摩。
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下面是我的续写尝试
Para 1: He sat down on the ground to catch his breath, thinking about what to do next.
What if Ben had gotten lost or, worse yet, caught by the flood? Hearing the relentless rain splattering against the rocks outside, he retrieved the whistle with trembling hands and began blowing, accompanied by the rhythmic flicker of his torch. The downpour had drowned the sound, yet deep down, he held onto a fragile thread of optimism that the highly changeable mountain weather would turn in an instant. Just as doubt crept into his mind, the rain thinned. Without hesitation, he stepped out into the open air, his voice hoarse as he called for Ben.
Para 2: At that moment, Dave heard some footsteps in the distance.
Instinctively, he stopped all movement, holding his breath to catch the sound again. But the footsteps faded away, leaving an unsettling silence. In a burst of desperation, Dave began blowing the whistle with all his might, the shrill sound cutting through the silence as the torch flickered defiantly in the darkness. Suddenly, amidst the chaos of noise and fear, he heard—“DAVE, I AM HERE!” A wave of relief washed over him as he stumbled toward Ben, who was lost in fear but found with hope.
ps：alternatives
one：Though the clouds still loomed heavy and gray, a silver lining graced their path, for they emerged unscathed in the embrace of a storm that had stirred only fear, yet left them untouched.
two：A wave of relief washed over him as he stumbled toward Ben. It was still cloudy out there but luckily, they were in the clear.
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