英语教学低效“对不住良心”，根在大学英文教授水平太低！我写《北京外国语大学英文教授: 满屏语病开国际大会、投屏²更严重、
第四段原文㉒The school had just three teachers and Zhang Tian was the only English teacher. ㉓The other two local teachers were responsible for maths and Chinese. ㉔Zhang Tian introduced more subjects to the school—music, art and PE to make school life healthier and livelier for his students. ㉕It is not surprising that PE is the kids’ favourite subject! ㉖Their school lives are now more attractive and interesting, and they enjoy playing football in the playground, as well as singing songs they’ve learnt. ㉗The school is now full of laughter and music. ㉘Zhang Tian is planning to organise the first-ever school concert! ㉙Everyone is very excited.
22. 蛇足only：全校拢共才三名教师，不必强调
23. 本国语文地位不容矮化！头两句得调整逻辑顺序，先说全校三师，接着说语文数学本地俩
24. 三处误用：1).图音体本来就在义务教育课程内，不宜用introdu
25. 用人(事主)或相关事物作主语说成the kid’s favourite subject is PE，而不用PE作主语，保持行文顺畅。贵州人民能歌善舞，女生男生却都最喜欢体育？虽有贵州村超，总觉很难相信。
26.1).指学生集体共同的校园生活(单数)the students' school life，可用healthy/lively/
27.语法没错，但要避免掉入“快乐教育”之类陷阱。
28. 误用感叹号！可用非限定性定语从句补充重要信息：, wh
29. 删very。男主只是筹划音乐会，不宜用力过猛。
第四段修改稿The school has just three teachers. Two locals are responsible for Chinese and math, while Zhang Tian teaches English. To make the students' school life healthy and lively, Zhang has restored music, art, and PE classes. 【It is not surprising that the kids' favourite is PE. As a result, their school lives become more colourful and attractive.】 They enjoy doing/
第五段原文㉚Zhang Tian’s first year is almost over. ㉛It has been a tough year, but he has enjoyed working with the children. ㉜What made him feel satisfied was that his students were able to read, speak and write in English and they became more confident in learning. ㉝Besides teaching, Zhang Tian also brought changes to the village. ㉞He contacted charity organisations about rebuilding the playground and setting up a library, and helped the villagers sell local products online. ㉟The contribution he made to the village was great, so he became very popular among the villagers and they treated him as one of them. ㊱The village is like his second home now. ㊲Although he had only intended to stay for one year, he now feels ready to stay for another year. ㊳He feels so happy that he followed his heart when choosing what to do with his life, even though it may not be what others expected of him.
段首加一句Time flew all too soon!时间飞得都太快！光阴荏苒，没享受够！一连五
30.本来就只签一年合同，何来的first year之说？改如Zhang Tian's one-year contract is nearing its end.
31.tough(艰难的;难对付的)改成challengin
32.应该继续用历史现在时。1). 使役结构被动意味浓Wha
33. village简单重复出现，此处换community社区
34. 又错用about！用不定式表示目的都不会？村校募捐修操场、
35.四处误用：1).固定说法The contribution he made to the ...[女的用she]常用于感念重要职务已离任人员的服务[
章天教学任
36. 用错词：second home短期使用(如度假等)的家，或夸张说法花很多时间但又不
37. 1).头半句是常用说法，only的位置可换originally(
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Following His Heart: Zhang Tian's Journey to a Village School
《追随内心：张天的村教之旅》
It was 8 p.m. when Zhang Tian returned to his small room, feeling tired. "What another long day!" he thought. He had started working at 7 a.m., took an hour-long break at noon, and rested briefly after supper. Nevertheless, he still needed to prepare lessons and correct homework after a break. This was a typical workday for him. Teaching in a remote village in Guizhou Province has been quite an experience.
Last year, Zhang Tian graduated from university and earned a teaching certificate. Like most, his parents hoped he would seek better opportunities in big cities and win himself a name(出人头地). Similarly, all his friends chose to live and work in large cities like Shanghai or Beijing, "to be a big fish in a big pond."
However, Zhang Tian thought otherwise. Since his early school years, Zhang had met great teachers in his town. Zhang had read the instructive story of President Xi settling in the countryside as an educated youth, as well as news about volunteer teachers. All their deeds inspired him to teach where he was needed most.
"Be a doer, not a me-tooer)_(做实干家，不做跟风者)!" he was determined to start a different lifestyle. Much to the surprise of his parents and friends, Zhang applied for a volunteer position and accepted a one-year offer to teach in a village school. Before long, Zhang set out on his journey with many books, clothes, and an eager heart. He imagined himself living with the real people of China, teaching and shaping the future generation of China's leaders and builders(章天想象自己
However, not everything lived up to Zhang Tian's expectations. The school had only three classrooms. Outside the classrooms was a simple playground, dusty on windy days and muddy on rainy days. Living in the village was hard. Power and water supplies were unreliable, so he could only shower every three or four days. In addition, he had to cook his meals. The thought of leaving crossed his mind, but he quickly gave up the idea because he soon found ways to deal with the challenges.
The school has just three teachers: two locals are responsible for Chinese and math, while Zhang Tian teaches English. To make the students' school life healthy and lively, Zhang has restored art, music, and PE classes. The children enjoy playing sports on the new playground and singing the songs they've just learned. The school and the village are filled with laughter and singing. Zhang Tian is planning to organise the first-ever school concert, which the school will invite parents and villagers to attend. Everyone is excited!
Time flew all too soon! Zhang Tian's one-year contract is nearing its end. Although it has been a challenging year, he has enjoyed his work with the children. He is satisfied that his students have grown more confident in learning and can use some English. Besides teaching, Zhang Tian has also brought changes to the community. For example, he asked friends to donate old books to set up a library and requested donations from their companies to have the playground rebuilt quickly. Additionally, he helped the villagers sell local products on social media platforms when and after he visited students' homes. His contributions to the village have been so significant that Zhang has become popular among the villagers, who treat him as one of their own. Now, Zhang has made the village his home. Although he had only intended to stay for one year, he is now ready for another. Zhang Tian is happy that he followed his heart when choosing what to do with his life, even though it might not be what others expected.
Zhang's journey has embodied the idea that "Life is what you make it." By stepping out of his comfort zone and choosing to "serve the people" where he is needed most, Zhang Tian has enriched his own life and created meaningful changes to the lives of others.
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