考研英语大作文AI批改prompt

2024年考研英语大作文

Directions:

Write an essay based on the picture and the chart below. In your essay, you should

1) describe the picture and the chart briefly,

2) interpret the implied meaning, and

3) give your comments.

Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET.(20 points)

请根据以上作文题目评分并分析，最后根据以下评分标准修改成满分作文；适当加入谚语金句名人名言。

评分标准

评分重点在于内容完整性、文章的组织连贯性、语法结构和词汇的多样性及语言的准确性。

第五档 (17-20分)

很好地完成了试题规定的任务。包含所有的内容要点；使用丰富的语法结构和词汇；语言自然流畅，语法错误极少；有效地采用了多种衔接手法，文字连贯，层次清晰；格式与语域恰当贴切。对目标读者完全产生了预期的效果。

第四档 (13-16分)

较好地完成了试题规定的任务。包含所有内容要点，允许漏掉一两个次重点；使用较丰富的语法结构和词汇；语言基本准确，只有在试图使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇时才有个别错误；采用了适当的衔接手法，层次清晰，组织较严密；格式与语域较恰当。对目标读者产生了预期的效果。

第三档 (9-12分)

基本完成了试题规定的任务。包含多数内容要点；应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的需求；有一些语法及词汇错误，但不影响理解；采用了简单的衔接手法，内容较连贯，层次较清晰；格式和语域基本合理。对目标读者基本产生了预期的效果。

第二档 (5-8分)

未能按要求完成试题规定的任务。漏掉或未能有效阐述一些内容要点，写了一些无关内容；语法结构单调、词汇项目有限；有较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解；未采用恰当的衔接手法，内容缺少连贯性；格式和语域不恰当。未能清楚地传达信息给读者。

第一档 (1-4分)

未完成试题规定的任务。明显遗漏主要内容，且有许多不相关的内容；语法项目和词汇的使用单调、重复；语言错误多，有碍读者对内容的理解，语言运用能力差；未使用任何衔接手法，内容不连贯，缺少组织、分段；无格式与语域概念。未能传达信息给读者。

零档 (0分)

所传达的信息或所用语言太少，无法评价；内容与要求无关或无法辨认。

考生作文如下：

伍教练硬塞20个生词的“作文”

Since the danger of breaching the dyke is not at hand, the municipal government has had the budget to build parks in recent years. Some busybody did the statistics and found a steady upward trend from 406 parks in 2020 to 670 in 2022, witnessing an increase of more than 100 new parks each year. It’s a windfall to the undertakers, who did not have to scuttle ships to settle breaches. The citizens carry hierograms to do exercises in the parks near their homes. Some fellow-townsmen even do diving workouts by making lots of water sprays, since they believe that by doing so, the river won’t change course. Some park goers go into the woods to dig out mortuary objects out of the ancient tombs of the river basin. They are neither reconciled to their low income nor willing to give up.

The change in town implies that the development of a city is like a time trail. Park is among the easiest infrastructure projects the government can achieve in a couple of years. On the contrary, reclaiming polders is beneficial in the long run, but the governor would criticize the mayor in a gruff voice: “You are merely a monk who puts up at a temple for a short stay, so you must complete something instead of a lost cause! Otherwise, you will hear the nickering-like laughter of the mayors from other cities.”

I’d rather hear the whinny instead of having more than enough parks. It’s beginner’s luck that the dyke has not breached. The budget should focus on the waterworks, such as putting a halter on the dragon king’s head. I’d like to make an analogy of English liaisons: the sands and stones are better put to extend the dyke further to the ferry terminal, which is owned by a hostess. We are suffering from a shortage of construction materials, so ship masts were abolished to build the parks, while clay figurines from art exhibitions were dumped into the river to build up the dyke. Every commune has been taxed for the park projects, scaring the local citizens out of their pants. Once the city is flooded, the rich people can set sail and flee, while the poor people will be ruined along with the parks in the evil wind.

To sum up my point of view, I’d like to stand on the prow and declare that the mayor and the governor have betrayed their people at the sound of the gurgling water. Only wise leadership can illuminate the road ahead of the city.

AI翻译速览：

由于没有决口的危险，市政府近几年有预算修建公园。有人统计，公园数量从2020年的406个，到2022年增加到670个，每年新增公园超过100个。殡葬业者们赚得盆满钵满，不用为了解决决口而沉船。市民们带着圣物在家附近的公园锻炼身体，一些老乡甚至跳水锻炼，大量喷水，因为他们相信这样河水就不会改道。一些公园游客到森林里挖出河流流域古墓中的陪葬品，他们不甘心收入低下，也不甘心放弃。

城镇的变迁，意味着城市的发展就像一条时间轨迹。公园是政府几年内最容易完成的基础设施项目之一。相反，从长远来看，收回圩田是有益的，但州长会用粗鲁的声音批评市长：“你只是一个在寺庙里短暂停留的和尚，所以你必须完成一些事情，而不是做无用功！否则，你会听到其他城市市长的窃笑声。”

我宁愿听到马嘶声，也不愿有太多的公园。堤坝没有破裂是初学者的运气。预算应该集中在水利工程上，比如给龙王的头上戴上笼头。我想打个英国联络人的比喻：最好把沙子和石头放在堤坝延伸到渡轮码头的地方，渡轮码头的主人是一位女主人。我们正饱受建筑材料短缺之苦，于是船桅杆被拆除来建造公园，艺术展览的泥人被扔进河里来修筑堤坝。每个公社都被征税来建造公园，吓得当地居民胆战心惊。一旦城市被淹没，富人可以扬帆逃走，而穷人则会连同公园一起被恶风摧毁。

总结我的观点，我想站在船头宣布，市长和州长在潺潺的流水声中背叛了他们的人民。只有明智的领导才能照亮城市前路。

Kimi：14分

### 评分与分析

**考生作文评分：** 14分

**分析：**

1. **内容完整性：** 考生作文基本覆盖了题目要求的三个部分：描述图片和图表、解释隐含意义、给出评论。但作文中对于图片和图表的具体描述较为模糊，没有明确指出图表和图片的具体内容。

2. **组织连贯性：** 文章结构较为清晰，有明确的开头、中间和结尾，但在逻辑连接上有所欠缺，部分段落之间的联系不够紧密。

3. **语法结构和词汇多样性：** 使用了一些较为复杂的句式和词汇，但有些地方使用不当，如“scuttle ships to settle breaches”和“carry hierograms to do exercises”等表达不够清晰。

4. **语言准确性：** 文章中有一些语法错误和用词不当，如“the danger of breaching the dyke is not at hand”应为“the danger of the dyke breaching is not imminent”。

5. **衔接手法：** 文章尝试使用了一些衔接手法，但不够自然和多样。

### 修改后的满分作文

In the provided picture and chart, we observe a stark contrast between the rapid increase in the number of parks and the neglected state of the city's dykes. The chart illustrates a significant upward trend, with the number of parks escalating from 406 in 2020 to 670 in 2022, an increase of over 100 parks annually. This surge in green spaces, while beneficial for the community, raises concerns about the city's priorities.

The image, on the other hand, depicts a scene where citizens engage in various activities within these parks, seemingly oblivious to the potential danger lurking behind the dykes. This juxtaposition between leisure and looming disaster underscores the city's shortsighted approach to urban development. As the saying goes, "A stitch in time saves nine," yet the city's focus remains on immediate gratification rather than long-term solutions.

In my view, the city's development is akin to a race against time, where infrastructure projects like parks are the easy milestones, while the arduous task of dyke maintenance is often overlooked. This is reminiscent of the adage, "The best time to plant a tree was 20 years ago. The second best time is now," which could be applied to the city's approach to dyke maintenance. The mayor, in his quest for immediate achievements, neglects the fundamental responsibility to safeguard the city's future, as warned by the governor: "You are but a guest in this city; your legacy should not be one of neglect."

To address this, I advocate for a more balanced approach, where the budget is allocated not only to parks but also to the critical infrastructure that protects our city. As Benjamin Franklin once said, "An ounce of prevention is worth a pound of cure." The city must invest in the waterworks, ensuring that the dykes are fortified against potential disasters. This is not just about building more parks; it's about securing the very foundation of our community.

In conclusion, standing at the helm of this city's future, I declare that our leaders must not betray the trust of their people. Only wise and foresighted leadership can guide us through the turbulent waters ahead. It is time to prioritize the well-being of our citizens over fleeting political gains.

豆包：1-4分

### 评分

- **分数**：1 - 4分

- **分析**

    - **内容完整性**：未完成试题规定任务，明显遗漏主要内容。如没有对图片和图表进行正确描述，也未有效解读其隐含意义并给出合理评论。

    - **语法结构和词汇**：语法项目和词汇使用单调、重复，且存在大量错误，严重影响内容理解。

    - **文章组织连贯性**：未使用任何衔接手法，内容不连贯，缺少组织和分段，无格式与语域概念。

### 修改后的满分作文

In recent years, as depicted in the picture and chart, there has been a remarkable development in the construction of parks. The picture shows a citizen happily expressing that the newly built park near their home is wonderful, especially highlighting the fitness area. Meanwhile, the chart illustrates a significant increase in the number of parks in a certain city, from 406 in 2020 to 670 in 2022.

This phenomenon implies the government's increasing attention to people's living environment and quality of life. As the saying goes, "A good environment is like a bright pearl on the crown of a city." Parks not only provide a place for people to exercise and relax but also contribute to the beautification of the city. It is an important measure to improve the well-being of the people.

In conclusion, we should appreciate the government's efforts in this regard. At the same time, we hope that more attention can be paid to the rational use and maintenance of parks to ensure that they can better serve the people.

Copilot (GPT-4)：未评分

Analysis and Feedback

Your essay is quite detailed and covers a lot of ground, but it could benefit from some refinement to meet the scoring criteria more effectively. Here’s a breakdown based on the provided scoring standards:

Content Completeness

• Strengths: You’ve included all the required elements: a description of the picture and chart, interpretation of the implied meaning, and your comments.

• Areas for Improvement: Some parts of your essay seem to deviate from the main topic, which could confuse the reader.

Organization and Coherence

• Strengths: Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion.

• Areas for Improvement: The transitions between ideas could be smoother. Try to use more cohesive devices to link your points.

Grammar and Vocabulary

• Strengths: You’ve used a variety of vocabulary and grammatical structures.

• Areas for Improvement: There are a few grammatical errors and awkward phrasings. Simplifying some sentences could improve clarity.

Language Accuracy

• Strengths: Your language is generally accurate.

• Areas for Improvement: There are some minor errors that could be polished.

Revised Essay

Since the danger of breaching the dyke is not at hand, the municipal government has had the budget to build parks in recent years. Statistics show a steady upward trend from 406 parks in 2020 to 670 in 2022, with more than 100 new parks added each year. This is a windfall for the undertakers, who did not have to scuttle ships to settle breaches. Citizens carry hierograms to exercise in the parks near their homes. Some even do diving workouts, believing that by doing so, the river won’t change course. Others dig out mortuary objects from ancient tombs in the river basin, driven by low income and a refusal to give up.

The change in town implies that the development of a city is like a time trial. Parks are among the easiest infrastructure projects the government can achieve in a couple of years. In contrast, reclaiming polders is beneficial in the long run, but the governor might criticize the mayor: “You are merely a monk who puts up at a temple for a short stay, so you must complete something instead of a lost cause! Otherwise, you will hear the laughter of mayors from other cities.”

I’d rather hear the whinny instead of having more than enough parks. It’s beginner’s luck that the dyke has not breached. The budget should focus on waterworks, such as putting a halter on the dragon king’s head. Like English liaisons, the sands and stones are better put to extend the dyke further to the ferry terminal. We are suffering from a shortage of construction materials, so ship masts were abolished to build the parks, while clay figurines from art exhibitions were dumped into the river to build up the dyke. Every commune has been taxed for the park projects, scaring the local citizens. Once the city is flooded, the rich can set sail and flee, while the poor will be ruined along with the parks.

To sum up, the mayor and the governor have betrayed their people at the sound of the gurgling water. Only wise leadership can illuminate the road ahead for the city.

Comments

• Proverbs and Quotes: Adding a few relevant proverbs or quotes can enhance your essay. For example, “A stitch in time saves nine” could emphasize the importance of proactive measures.

• Cohesion: Use more cohesive devices like “Furthermore,” “Moreover,” and “In addition” to link your ideas smoothly.

• Clarity: Simplify complex sentences to improve readability.

With these adjustments, your essay should meet the criteria for a higher score. Keep practicing, and you’ll continue to improve!

智谱清言：11分

评分： 11/20

分析：

内容：基本涵盖了图片和图表的内容，但缺乏对图片细节的描述，以及对图表趋势的深入分析。

结构：文章结构较为松散，段落之间缺乏清晰的逻辑连接。

语法和词汇：存在一些语法错误和词汇重复，例如 "undertakers" 应为 "undertakers"，"nickering-like" 不必要。

衔接：缺乏有效的衔接手法，内容跳跃，缺乏连贯性。

语言：语言表达不够准确，存在中式英语，例如 "ship masts were abolished" 应为 "ship masts were removed"。

修改建议：

1. 内容：

描述图片：添加对图片中人物、环境、事件的细节描述，例如：人物的表情、动作，环境中的树木、河流等。

分析图表：深入分析图表趋势，例如：公园数量的增长率，公园类型的变化等。

2. 结构：

清晰分段：将文章分为引言、主体、结论三个部分，使文章结构更清晰。

逻辑连接：使用过渡词和短语，例如 "however", "therefore", "in conclusion" 等，使段落之间连接更紧密。

3. 语法和词汇：

检查语法：仔细检查语法错误，例如时态、语态、单复数等。

丰富词汇：使用更多高级词汇和短语，例如 "explosion in the number of parks", "long-term benefits", "short-sighted approach" 等。

4. 衔接：

使用过渡词：使用更多过渡词和短语，使文章更流畅。

使用例证：使用具体的例子来支持观点，使论证更有说服力。

5. 语言：

避免中式英语：使用地道的英语表达方式，例如 "reclaim polders" 应为 "reclaim wetlands"。

引用名言：适当引用谚语、金句、名人名言，使文章更具文采。

修改示例：

(引言)

The above picture vividly depicts a city where the municipal government has invested heavily in park construction, while neglecting crucial infrastructure such as flood defenses. The chart illustrates the rapid increase in the number of parks from 2020 to 2022, raising concerns about the city's priorities and long-term sustainability.

(主体)

As depicted in the picture, citizens are enjoying the newly built parks, engaging in various activities such as exercise and leisure. However, the focus on park construction comes at the expense of essential infrastructure like dykes and flood defenses. The chart clearly shows a staggering increase in park numbers, indicating a disproportionate allocation of resources. This short-sighted approach prioritizes immediate gratification over long-term resilience.

The consequences of neglecting flood defenses are severe. As the saying goes, "A stitch in time saves nine." Investing in preventive measures now can prevent catastrophic damage in the future. The city is vulnerable to flooding, and the lack of adequate defenses puts lives and property at risk.

(结论)

In conclusion, while parks enhance the quality of life, the city must prioritize essential infrastructure to ensure long-term sustainability. Wise leadership requires balancing immediate needs with future challenges. As the proverb states, "Prevention is better than cure." It is crucial for the city to invest in flood defenses to safeguard its citizens and future prosperity.

请注意，这只是一个示例，您可以根据自己的理解和分析进行修改和完善。

通义千问：未评分

根据提供的材料来看，原作文内容存在不少与题意不符的内容，并且逻辑不够清晰，语言表达也不够准确，部分内容显得突兀或者不相关，因此按照评分标准，这篇作文可能落在第二档甚至更低。

### 分析：

1. 描述部分：原作文没有清晰描述图画内容以及图表数据的变化趋势。

2. 解读寓意：作文中涉及了公园建设的数量增长，但是后续内容偏离主题，讨论了与城市基础设施建设相关的其他方面，如河堤加固等，缺乏明确的主题思想。

3. 评论部分：个人观点表述混乱，且含有不适宜的内容。

### 修改后的满分作文示例：

**As the chart indicates**, there has been a significant rise in the number of urban parks over the past few years, from 406 in 2020 to 670 in 2022, reflecting an annual growth rate of over 100 parks. **The illustration depicts citizens engaging in various activities within these green spaces**, symbolizing a vibrant community life fostered by these additions to the urban landscape.

**This phenomenon suggests a positive trend towards enhancing public well-being through environmental improvements**. With increasing urbanization, green areas serve as vital lungs for the city, providing residents with spaces for relaxation and recreation. **As the proverb goes, "a society grows great when old men plant trees under whose shade they know they shall never sit"**, indicating the foresight required for sustainable urban planning.

**However, it is essential to ensure that such developments are balanced with necessary infrastructural investments**. While parks are crucial for quality of life, they should not overshadow fundamental needs like flood prevention or water management systems. **In the words of Confucius, "a journey of a thousand miles begins with a single step"**, every initiative taken today lays the foundation for a more resilient tomorrow.

**In conclusion**, the expansion of urban green spaces marks a commendable effort toward improving the living environment. Yet, policymakers must strike a balance between short-term achievements and long-term sustainability to truly serve the public interest. **Only through harmonious development can we build a city that thrives for generations to come**.

这个版本的作文更好地符合了题目的要求，描述了图片和图表内容，解读了背后的含义，并提供了个人见解。同时，它使用了更加丰富和准确的语言来增强文章的表现力，并引用了名言来加强论点。这样可以达到评分标准中的第五档要求。

讯飞星火：9-12分

根据提供的作文内容和评分标准，该考生的作文大致可评为第三档（9-12分）。以下是对这篇作文的详细分析：

**内容完整性**：

考生尝试描述了图表和图片的内容，并进行了一定的解读和评论。然而，描述可能不够详尽，且部分内容与题目要求不完全相关。

**文章组织连贯性**：

文章结构尚可，但缺乏清晰的段落划分和逻辑连接。一些观点跳跃，使得文章的流畅性和连贯性受到影响。

**语法结构和词汇的多样性及语言的准确性**：

文中出现了一些语法错误和用词不当的情况，影响了文章的整体质量。同时，词汇使用较为单一，缺乏变化。

**修改建议**：

1. 明确分段，每一段专注于一个主要观点。

2. 使用更多高级词汇和复杂句型来提升文章的语言水平。

3. 确保所有论点都紧扣主题，避免偏离中心思想。

4. 加入适当的谚语或名人名言以增强文章的说服力和文采。

**修改后的文章示例**：

(注意：以下为简化示例，具体细节和数据可能需要根据实际情况调整。)

"A picture is worth a thousand words," as the adage goes, and the chart before us paints a vivid portrait of our city's evolution. From 2020 to 2022, our green spaces have blossomed, witnessing a growth from 406 to 670 parks—a testament to both our foresight and fiscal prudence. However, this expansion begs an inquiry: are we fostering beauty or neglecting necessity?

The burgeoning number of parks symbolizes more than just urban renewal; it reflects a shift in priorities. As Sun Tzu wisely noted, "Opportunities multiply as they are seized." In seizing the opportunity of a stable dyke, our administration has indeed cultivated leisure. Yet, one might ponder, at what cost? For every Eden we erect, a Pharaoh's tomb lies unguarded.

The true measure of development lies not in its immediacy but in its sustainability. While parks offer a temporary respite, robust infrastructure stands as the bedrock of enduring prosperity. Hence, the ancient wisdom, "A stitch in time saves nine," rings true; investing in our dykes today prevents catastrophe tomorrow.

In conclusion, our city's tapestry is rich with green threads of leisure and relaxation. However, let us not forget the golden threads of resilience and fortitude that underpin our community's fabric. As Winston Churchill eloquently stated, "We shape our buildings; thereafter they shape us." Let our structures mirror our collective vision—one of beauty, strength, and an unwavering commitment to the future.