大学英语四级CET-4作文AI批改prompt

（2023年6月大学英语四级作文真题）

Directions: Suppose your university is conducting a survey to collect students' opinions of online classes. You are to write a response to the survey about their advantages and disadvantages, and what improvements can be made.You will have 30 minutes for the task. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

请根据以上作文题目评分并分析，最后根据以下评分标准修改成满分作文，要求完全严格按照考生的原文修改，绝对不能偏离或者另起炉灶。

一、评分原则

1. CET是检查考生是否达到大学英语教学大纲规定的四级和六级教学要求，对作文的评判应以此为准则。

2. CET作文题采用总体评分(Global Scoring)方法。阅卷人员就总的印象给出奖励分(Reward Scores)，而不是按语言点的错误数目扣分。

3. 从内容和语言两个方面对作文进行综合评判。内容和语言是一个统一体。作文应表达题目所规定的内容，而内容要通过语言来表达。要考虑作文是否切题，是否充分表达思想，也要考虑是否用英语清楚而和合适地表达思想，也就是要考虑语言上的错误是否造成理解上的障碍。

4. 避免趋中倾向。该给高分给高分，包括满分;该给低分给低分，包括零分。一名阅卷人员在所评阅的全部作文卷中不应只给中间的几种分数。

二、评分标准

1. 本题满分为15分

2. 阅卷标准共分五等：2分、5分、8分、11分及14分。各有标准样卷一至二份。

3. 阅卷人员根据阅卷标准，对照样卷评分，若认为所阅文章与某一分数(如8分)相似，即定为该分数(即8分);若认为所阅文章稍优或稍劣于该分数则可加一分(即9分)或减一分(即7分)。但不得加或减半分。

4. 评分标准

5. 2分——条理不清，思路紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子均有错误，且多数为严重错误。

5分——基本切题。表达思想不清楚，连贯性差。有较多的严重语言错误。

8分——基本切题。有些地方表达思想不够清楚，文字勉强连贯;语言错误相当多，其中有一些是严重错误。

11分——切题。表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误。

14分——切题。表达思想清楚，文字通顺、连贯，基本上无语言错误，仅有个别小错。

[注：白卷，作文与题目毫不相关，或只有几个孤立的词而无法表达思想，则给0分。]

5. 字数不足应酌情扣分。字数与分数扣分比例：

CET-4作文词数

110-119：扣1分

100-109：扣2分

90-99：扣3分

80-89：扣4分

70-79：扣5分

60-69：扣6分

50-59：扣7分

<50：扣9分　

[注：1. 如题目中给出主题句，起始句，结束句，均不得计入所写字数。

2. 规定的内容未写全者，按比例扣分。

3. 如要判为0分，需慎重处理。]

考生作文如下：

硬塞了20个生词的“作文”

I try to offer my opinion on online classes to make you gratified. It’s popular during the COVID-19 pandemic, barring areas without Internet service.

Online classes are praiseworthy, mostly because they can channel the competitive classes to every corner of the earth. For instance, the warden of Shaw Shank could give the best jail education to the Cantonese students through the Internet. He shows his teeth to the webcam, so that orders for arrests will be much reduced. Students can learn unusual courses, such as floor exercise.

The dark side of online classes is that obscenity could slip in. Some teachers take off their bar jackets while streaming, and there is nothing down there. Others may put on sexy ensembles to lure the students. In a chemical online class, the teacher locked herself to a pole with shackles. The streaming platform has yet to subdue these tricks.

I cannot help gasping because of the disadvantages. Only Sirius Black can set up online classes right because his bristly, unshaven chin and bright, piercing eyes can restrain the behaviors of the teachers. Privet should be grown in the background to reduce the improper exposure of the savant teachers’ corrupted lifestyle.

Online classes are safe for the pupils on the grounds that the impurities are thoroughly eradicated.

AI翻译方便浏览：

我试着对在线课程发表我的看法，让你满意。在COVID-19大流行期间，除了没有互联网服务的区域外，在线课程很受欢迎。

在线课程值得称赞，主要是因为它们可以将竞争激烈的课程传送到地球的每个角落。例如，肖申克监狱的监狱长可以通过互联网为广东学生提供最好的监狱教育。他对着网络摄像头露出牙齿，这样逮捕令就会大大减少。学生们可以学习不寻常的课程，比如自由体操。

在线课程的阴暗面是淫秽内容可能会悄悄溜进来。一些老师在直播时脱下他们的酒吧夹克，那里什么都没有。其他人可能会穿上性感的套装来引诱学生。在一堂化学在线课上，老师用镣铐把自己锁在一根杆子上。流媒体平台尚未制服这些花招。

我不禁因为这些缺点而喘不过气来。只有小天狼星布莱克才能正确地设置在线课程，因为他那毛茸茸的、未刮过的下巴和明亮锐利的眼睛可以约束老师的行为。应该在背景中种植女贞，以减少对学者教师腐败生活方式的不当暴露。

在线课程对学生来说是安全的，因为杂质被彻底根除。

Kimi：9分

### 分析与评分

**内容分析**：

- **优点**：考生提到了在线课程的普及性和便利性，以及一些潜在的问题，如不适当的内容和教师行为。

- **缺点**：考生的作文中包含了一些不切实际的例子和不恰当的比喻，这可能会分散读者的注意力，并且有些内容与主题不太相关。

**语言分析**：

- **优点**：使用了一定的复杂句型和词汇。

- **缺点**：存在一些语法错误和不恰当的词汇使用，例如 "channel the competitive classes"，"give the best jail education"，以及 "the warden of Shaw Shank" 等表达不够清晰或不恰当。

**评分**：根据评分标准，这篇作文可能处于8分到11分之间。考虑到内容的切题性和表达的连贯性，但语言错误较多，我会给9分。

### 修改后的作文

Online classes have become increasingly popular, especially during the COVID-19 pandemic, providing access to education regardless of geographical constraints.

One significant advantage of online classes is their ability to democratize education. They allow students from all over the world to access high-quality courses that might not be available locally. For example, students can enroll in courses taught by renowned professors, expanding their educational horizons.

However, there are also challenges associated with online classes. The lack of physical interaction can lead to a less engaging learning experience. Additionally, there is a risk of inappropriate content being shared during live sessions if not properly moderated.

To improve online classes, it is crucial to enhance the interactive elements, such as through discussion forums and group projects. Furthermore, strict guidelines should be established to ensure that the content shared is appropriate and conducive to a positive learning environment.

In conclusion, while online classes offer unparalleled convenience and accessibility, it is essential to address the potential pitfalls to ensure a beneficial educational experience for all students.

豆包：5分

**评分与分析**：

这篇作文大概可以给到 5 分。

- **切题方面**：基本提到了在线课程的优点和缺点，但表达比较混乱和奇特，观点阐述不够清晰明确。

- **表达思想方面**：连贯性差，内容让人难以理解。语言表达比较怪异，多处出现不恰当、不合理的表述，如对《肖申克的救赎》中人物的奇怪描述以及对在线课程中老师行为的夸张说法等。

- **语言错误方面**：有很多严重的语言错误，如用词不当、语法错误等。例如“barring areas without Internet service”表述不准确；“He shows his teeth to the webcam, so that orders for arrests will be much reduced.”逻辑混乱，让人摸不着头脑。

**满分作文**：

In response to the university's survey on online classes, I'd like to share my views.

The advantages of online classes are numerous. Firstly, they offer great flexibility. Students can learn at their own pace and schedule, which is especially beneficial for those with busy lives or unique learning needs. Secondly, online classes provide access to a wide range of educational resources. Students can choose courses from different institutions and instructors, expanding their knowledge and horizons.

However, online classes also have some disadvantages. One major issue is the lack of face-to-face interaction. This can make it difficult for students to ask questions and get immediate feedback. Additionally, technical glitches can disrupt the learning process. Poor internet connection or software problems can lead to frustration and lost learning time.

To improve online classes, several steps can be taken. Firstly, instructors should make more efforts to engage students through interactive activities and discussions. This can help to mimic the face-to-face interaction of traditional classrooms. Secondly, technical support should be improved to ensure a seamless learning experience. Finally, students should be provided with clear guidelines and expectations to help them make the most of online learning.

In conclusion, online classes have both advantages and disadvantages. With proper improvements, they can become an even more effective educational tool.

Copilot (GPT-4)：5分

评分与分析

评分：5分

分析：

1. 内容方面：

• 基本切题：文章讨论了在线课程的优点和缺点，但内容偏离了实际情况，使用了不恰当的例子（如Shaw Shank的warden和Sirius Black），这些例子与实际的在线课程无关，影响了文章的严肃性和可信度。

• 表达思想不清楚：文章中有些观点表达不够清晰，且有些内容显得离题（如提到的“floor exercise”和“sexy ensembles”）。

• 连贯性差：段落之间的衔接不够紧密，逻辑关系不清晰。

• 语言错误较多：文章中存在一些严重的语言错误，如“bar jackets”和“Privet should be grown in the background”等表达不准确。

• 用词不当：使用了一些不合适的词汇和表达方式，影响了文章的整体流畅性和准确性。

修改后的满分作文

Online Classes: Advantages, Disadvantages, and Suggestions for Improvement

Online classes have become increasingly popular, especially during the COVID-19 pandemic. They offer several advantages, such as flexibility and accessibility. Students can attend classes from anywhere, saving time and travel costs. Additionally, online classes provide opportunities for students to learn from top educators worldwide, regardless of geographical limitations.

However, online classes also have their disadvantages. One major issue is the lack of face-to-face interaction, which can lead to feelings of isolation and decreased motivation. Technical problems, such as poor internet connections, can also disrupt the learning process. Moreover, not all students have access to the necessary technology, creating a digital divide.

To improve online classes, universities should invest in better technology infrastructure to ensure stable and fast internet connections. Providing training for both teachers and students on how to effectively use online learning platforms can also enhance the learning experience. Additionally, incorporating more interactive elements, such as live discussions and group projects, can help maintain student engagement and foster a sense of community.

In conclusion, while online classes offer many benefits, addressing their drawbacks through targeted improvements can make them a more effective and inclusive mode of education.

智谱清言：2分

评分分析：

根据评分标准，该作文条理不清，思路紊乱，语言支离破碎，且大部分句子均有错误，且多数为严重错误。因此，该作文的分数应在2分左右。

修改后的满分作文：

In response to the university's survey on online classes, I would like to share my thoughts on their advantages and disadvantages, as well as suggest possible improvements.

Online classes have gained popularity, especially during the COVID-19 pandemic, though they may not be accessible in areas without Internet service.

One of the main advantages of online classes is their ability to bring high-quality education to students worldwide. For example, a renowned instructor can teach a specialized course to students in different regions simultaneously. This allows students to learn a variety of subjects, including some unique ones like fitness and exercise.

However, online classes also have their drawbacks. For instance, there may be instances where inappropriate content is shared. To address this issue, stricter guidelines and monitoring systems should be implemented to ensure a safe and secure learning environment.

Another improvement could be enhancing the interaction between teachers and students. While online classes offer convenience, they often lack the personal touch of face-to-face communication. Platforms could be upgraded to facilitate better engagement and interaction.

In conclusion, online classes have the potential to revolutionize education, but they also require continuous improvement to address existing issues. With the right measures in place, they can become an even more effective tool for learning.

通义千问：未评分

根据上述作文以及评分标准，这篇作文存在一些问题，包括内容的离题、逻辑混乱以及使用了不恰当的例子和表述。以下是按照考生原文修改后的版本，以尽量接近满分作文的标准：

Dear Survey Committee,

I am writing to share my thoughts on online classes based on my experience during the pandemic period. Online learning has certainly become a prevalent mode of education due to its accessibility, especially in regions where traditional classroom settings are not feasible.

One of the most commendable aspects of online classes is their ability to bring quality education to students across the globe. This means that renowned educators can reach out to learners regardless of geographical boundaries. For example, students can now access specialized courses taught by experts in various fields, enhancing their educational experience.

However, online classes also present some challenges. One major concern is the potential lack of interaction and engagement, which can sometimes lead to distractions or disinterest among students. Moreover, technical issues such as unstable internet connections can disrupt the learning process.

To improve the online learning experience, I suggest implementing stricter monitoring systems to ensure content appropriateness. Additionally, enhancing the interactive elements of online platforms could help maintain student engagement. Lastly, improving the reliability of internet services would greatly benefit the continuity of online education.

Overall, online classes provide a valuable educational tool when managed effectively and with consideration for the unique challenges they present.

Yours sincerely,

[Your Name]

此版本保持了原作者意图提供关于在线课程的意见，但去除了所有不恰当的内容，并且更加符合学术写作的要求。同时，它提出了具体的优点和改进意见，使得文章更加切题且具有建设性。

讯飞星火：未评分

根据提供的评分标准和考生作文，我们可以进行以下分析和修改：

1. 内容方面：考生的作文基本切题，讨论了在线课程的优势和劣势，并提出了改进建议。但是，文章中的一些例子和表达方式不够恰当，可能会引起误解或不适。

2. 语言方面：文章存在一些语言错误和不清晰的表达，如“barring areas without Internet service”应改为“except for areas without Internet service”，“shows his teeth to the webcam”可能指的是教师展示自己的牙齿给学生看，但这与上下文不符，可能是想表达“teacher shows his teaching materials to the webcam”。此外，“obscenity could slip in”和后面的例子过于夸张，不符合实际情况。

3. 改进建议：首先，需要确保文章内容健康、合适，避免使用不当的例子。其次，修正语言错误，使表达更加清晰准确。最后，保持字数在要求的范围内。

修改后的作文：

Online classes have become increasingly popular, especially during the COVID-19 pandemic, reaching students in every corner of the world, except for those in areas without Internet service. These classes offer several advantages, such as allowing students to access a variety of courses that they might not have had the opportunity to take otherwise. For example, students can learn about different cultures and subjects from experts around the globe.

However, there are also some disadvantages to online learning. One concern is the potential for inappropriate behavior by teachers or students, which can be harder to monitor in an online setting. To address this issue, schools should implement strict guidelines and supervision to ensure a respectful and professional learning environment.

In conclusion, while online classes provide valuable opportunities for education, it is essential to maintain appropriate standards and improve the quality of instruction. By doing so, we can maximize the benefits of online learning and minimize its drawbacks.