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"Every encounter is a surprise"
My heart is drenched in wine,
you'll be on my mind.
这是HENRY老师的第299篇原创
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2024中考近在咫尺(just around the corner),
许多教师,家长和学生对如何攻克作文这个霸道总裁如何深感迷茫(feel at a loss),
怎么实现弯道超车(corner overtaking)?
如何考试完成后体验“两岸猿声啼不住,轻舟已过万重山。”
而不是“念天地之悠悠,独怆然而涕下”?
注入灵魂:“乘风破浪会有时,直挂云帆济沧海。”
相信各位经过努力一定能凤凰涅槃,
阳光一定会地肆意地洒在你的身上(every inch of your skin),既慷慨又大方。
来一抹热播剧“庆余年2”范闲的迷人(enchanting)表情~
今天Henry老师带大家一起巧妙解读( have an in-depth analysis)
如何应对校园欺凌类应用文(practical text)?
看完瞬间有“内卷天花板”!
卷王出没!不服来战!
前方究!极!核!能!!!
(24杨浦三模)在这份试卷“阅读理解”的B 篇中,主人公Gary遭受到了校园霸凌,最终 Ted 将所有的事情都告诉了Mr Lin。在经过多番调查后,Mr Lin找到了事件的幕后“主使”Jerry。在跟他们分别谈话之后,问题最终得以解决。但是 Mr Lin还是希望继续给予Gary安慰和建议,对Jerry加以教育和告诫,因此他分别给 Gary和 Jerry写了一封电子邮件。请从 Gary 和 Jerry中选择一位, 以 Mr Lin的口吻给他写一封邮件。
最强分析:
内容(8分)
To Gary(victim):安慰4 + 建议(2-3条,4)
To Jerry:教育4+ 告诫(2-3条,4)
注:安慰/教育不充分、单薄,酌情扣分;
建议/告诫缺一条,扣2分;
建议/告诫不具体(incomplete)、不切实际(impractical)、不合理(unreasonable),适当扣分。
安慰/教育,建议/告诫的先后顺序不影响评分
“建议”参考内容:
★ask others(parents, teachers, peers同龄人…) for help
★fight back /say no/tell them it’s not right Gary didn’t dare to do
★try to forgive
“告诫”参考内容
★apologize = make an apology; say sorry
express your sincere apology
★ give up bullying others (will be punished severely otherwise)
严厉惩罚
★make friends with classmates
语言(8分)
整体评判,每个错误扣0.5分,不重复扣分
结构(4分)
有文体意识1:恰当开头、结尾
逻辑和指代清晰 1
句式丰富(长短句结合)1
表达地道,无明显中式英语1
HENRY原创范文:
Dear Gary,
It’s quite brave of you to tell me your trouble. You’ve done a f_ __1_____ job!
完美开篇,适时安慰
If you are bullied next time, ask them w_____2______ they feel good when bullying others.
Besides, I have already a ______3______ three excellent students to keep a close eye on(紧密关注 )the bullying situation.
What’s more, if they keep laughing and shouting at you, you should go to my office and we’’ll discuss how to solve it p ____4_____(基于文本,巧妙改编).
建议有效,值得借鉴
Our school has effective anti-bullying rules. The student who goes a______5______ the rules will be severely punished
如有触犯,严厉惩罚
Above all, it’s not your f______6_____to be bullied. We will always be on/by your s_____7_____ if it happens next time.
Cheer up(相当于Chin up振作起来) and have a nice day!
贴切总结,首尾呼应
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