Magic Backpack Rescued Sisters Trapped in the Storm
--2024-10 强基联盟 读后续写
A high-pitched scream stopped Laura Douglas in her tracks. Spinning around on the narrow dirt path, she thought that her cousin Cassie was in danger. Instead, Cassie was knee-deep in flowers that covered the meadow (草地) like a quilt.
“Cassie! You scared me to death!” Laura scolded, her voice echoing through the meadow. “I am sorry,” Cassie, absorbed in her photography, didn’t notice the thick fog rolling in, consuming the nearby mountains. “Not again!” Laura complained, her eyes shifting to the approaching clouds. “We gotta go!”
Cassie’s focus remained on her camera, capturing the short-lived beauty of the moment. Laura tied a red scarf around her hair. “Let’s go back to the campsite.” The girls quickly ran down the winding path, the meadow now covered by a thick fog and a steady, cold rain. The road turned slippery, and they had to move slowly to avoid sliding down.
“It’s dangerous! We need shelter now!” Cassie screamed after a loud crack of thunder, the storm’s strength increasing rapidly. Laura’s keen eyes found a small cave in the rock face, partly hidden by overhanging branches. It wasn’t much, but it offered a chance to escape the rain.
“Cassie, over here!” Laura called out, her voice barely carrying over the wind.
Cassie, wet and shaking, stumbled towards the place of Laura’s voice. As she approached, she could see the shelter. It wasn’t perfect, but it was better than nothing.
“Smart thinking, Laura,” Cassie said, her teeth chattering (打颤) with cold as she pressed her backpack close to her chest. The backpack, a tough and waterproof (防水的) model, had been a gift from her father, an experienced hiker who had insisted on its numerous pockets and sections for emergency supplies. Little did they know, his advice would prove invaluable on this day.
注意:
续写词数应为150左右；
请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。
Para1: “Check your backpack,” Laura instructed, her voice being hopeful.
Para2：As night fell, the storm finally began to die down.
一、设计理念：
1. 本文人物：主角：Laura Cassie 从原文叙述可推 Laura 更像是个领导者，caring and loving ， considerate
配角： Cassie’s father
2. 所给原文内容：这对小姐妹在山上游玩，Cassie 痴迷于摄影。天气突变，狂风暴雨电闪雷鸣。Laura 提议要躲雨，恰好发现附近有个小山洞可以避雨。
3. 续写构思：结合Para1: “Check your backpack,” Laura instructed, her voice being hopeful. 设计Laura让 Cassie 打开背包，结合原文最后一段emergency supplies 可知应该包里有很多应急物品。考生可以结合chattering with cold ， 以及Para2：As night fell, the storm finally began to die down. 去想象一下包里有哪些物品可以帮到他们：如地图，指南针，毯子，巧克力棒，手电筒，水，火柴，便携式燃气灶等等。根据故事情节需要来设计。第二段的设计可以结合： Let’s go back to the campsite 可以推知最终要回到campsite. 既可以考虑当晚风雨变小就赶往露营地，夜可以考虑两人在山洞过了一夜第二天早上再回。考生可以自主创作。
二、教学过程
Step1: Analyze characters ：Major roles: Laura Cassie Minor roles: Cassie’s father
Step2: Sort through the plot of the story
Conflict : Laura and Cassie were stuck in a storm in a mountain.
Solution: Using the emergency supplies, the cousins survived the storm.
Step3: Read for clues for the new plot of the continuation writing
Use hidden clues to create logical and reasonable details for the continuation.
Step4: Design plots for each paragraph
Para1: “Check your backpack,” Laura instructed, her voice being hopeful.
Link1: Who opened the backpack? What supplies were in it?
Body: What did they do with the supplies? How did they feel?
Link2: What was the situation in the cave now ?
Para2：As night fell, the storm finally began to die down.
Link3: What about the circumstances? What did they do?
Body: How did they get back to the campsite? How about their feeling?
Ending: What was the ending of the adventure?// What lessons did they learn?
Possible Version
Para1: “Check your backpack,” Laura instructed, her voice being hopeful. Cassie, still quivering with cold, unzipped the tough and waterproof backpack in the hope of finding something invaluable. It was pouring cats and dogs , the wind howling even more mercilessly. Wearing a worried look on her face, Cassie rummaged through the bag. What astonished the cousins was that the magic backpack contained a wide variety of invaluable emergency supplies. Cassie grabbed a flashlight, some chocolate bars and compressed biscuits and a blanket. Relief overwhelmed the cousins, their eyes sparkling with a glimmer of hope. Exhausted and hungry, they shared some chocolate and biscuits to boost their energy. To keep warm, they huddled together in the corner of the cave, covered with the blanket and praying for good luck。 （119）
Para2：As night fell, the storm finally began to die down.
Darkness swallowing the foggy mountain, the cousins’ panic gave way to hope. In the weak glow of the flashlight, they exchanged a determined look. “ We’d better find our way back.” Laura said firmly, holding Cassie’s hand tightly. Leaving the temporary shelter, Laura and Cassie walked down the slippery winding path leading to their campsite, struggling to keep their balance to avoid sliding down. After what seemed an eternity, a familiar tent came into their vision. No sooner had they made it to their campsite than they hugged each other tightly, tears of joy welling up in their eyes. It dawned on them that a backpack with emergency supplies did make all the difference to their lives. (118)
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