郑巧燕老师|2024年11月强基联盟高一上英语期中应用文学案

文摘   教育   2024-11-22 12:03   浙江  
应用文原题

假定你是高一学生李华,刚参加了一年一度的校运会。请你写一篇题目为“What Touched Me Most in Sports Meeting”的稿件向校英文报投稿,内容包括:

1.最感动的场景;2.你的感想。

注意:1.写作词数应为80左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

What Touched Me Most in School Sports Meeting


审题:

1.审体裁:

明确体裁话题:属于投稿类应用文活动报道或活动介绍投稿类应用文是近几年高考的常考题型。一般要求考生对学校最近举行的活动进行介绍,语言应简练理性。这种体裁的写作要拿高分,就要把握好这一体裁的特点,善于有选择的对活动过程进行叙述要求突出主题, 并掌握相关的词汇和句式。

2.审结构和要点:

其基本结构:最好分三段。

第一段:你参加了校运动会+愿意分享最感人的场景

可从5W和一个H方面写活动概要,即何时(when)何地(where何人(whowhy(为何)做了何事(what,必要时适当增删加上写作目的。

第二段:(征文部分)活动细节:最感人的场景。

第三段:(结尾部分)你的感想(意义感悟)

3.时态:过去时叙述场景+现在时意义感悟

学生容易发生的问题是

1.不熟悉文体特点。审题判定文体为投稿类活动报道,故李华身份不必交代;

2.主次不当,中心不突出。不会恰当叙述活动过程,与主题无关的废话占比太多,感人的细节却一笔带过

3.不知如何适当增加细节。如描写感人瞬间可以具化。

4.语言错误多,表达不地道、词汇句子缺乏亮点。

话题素材整理

1.关键词语

① 高一新生__________________

② 一年一度的________________

③ 运动会____________________

④ 运动员____________________

⑤ 参加比赛__________________

⑥ 为班级争光________________

⑦ 体现体育精神________________

⑧ 体育项目___________________

⑨ 互相竞争____________________

⑩ 奖牌________________________

⑪ 跑道_______________________

⑫ 突出______________________

⑬ 破纪录____________________

⑭ 感人场景/瞬间________________

⑮ 选手_______________________

⑯ 你追我赶_____________________

⑰ 落后_______________________

⑱ 摔倒______________________

⑲ 受伤____________________

⑳ 流血____________________

21 脸色苍白_________________

22 汗流浃背 _________________

23 汗如雨下___________________

24 浑身是汗____________________

25 挣扎着站起来_____________

26 坚持______________________

27 面对困难/挑战/障碍   ___________

28 克服困难_________________

29 拒绝放弃__________________

30 最后______________________

31 终点线___________________

32 成功______________________

33 获得第一名________________

34 啦啦队员__________________

35 欢呼______________________

36 雷鸣般的掌声_________________

37 毅力和勇气_______________

38 值得尊敬________________

39 向某人学习________________

40 为某人树立榜样______________

41 ……产生影响______________

42 友谊第一,比赛第二 _____________________________

2.遣词造句

第一段:活动概要目的+活动/时间/地点+写作目的(揭示主题)

为了增强学生身体素质,丰富校园生活, 上周末我们学校举行运动会。在期间,我捕捉到很多难忘的瞬间,其中1500米长跑最让我感动(用定语从句)。

____________________________________________________________________,our school ________________________________ last weekend. During this period I _____________ _________________________________, ________________the 1500m race touched me most.

为了促进身体健康,鼓励健康的生活方式,上周末我们学校在学校体育场组织了一年一度的运动会有数百名学生参加了这次运动会。最让我感动的是在接力赛中体现的运动员的团队精神。(用名词性从句)

_______________________________________________________, our school organized ______________________ in the school stadium last weekend. Hundreds of students ______ _________________ the sports meeting.__________________________ was the team spirit of the athletes in the relay race. 

上周末见证了我们校园的一场轰轰烈烈的运动会很多优秀的运动员脱颖而出但我想与大家分享的是大卫的故事。他参加3000米,他的表现最让我感动。(强调句/定语从句

______________________________________________________________on our campus. Many excellent athletes _____________________. But _________________ David's story ________I would like to share with you. He ____________________ the 3000m, __________________ _____________________________________. 

中间段:活动细节-----感人瞬间(从面到点,点面结合,突出最感人瞬间)

整个活动充满了感人瞬间,运动员们在不同项目上为班级荣誉而激烈竞争看台上的欢呼声和掌声鼓励着参赛者全力以赴。 (with结构)

                             ,with_     _______ ________________________________________________ from the stands encouraged the participants to do their best.

尤其令人感动的无疑是接力赛。为了为班级赢得荣誉,我们班运动员们天天努力训练

在比赛时,他们在赛场上互相鼓励,超越了一个个对手,把自己推向极限,最终问鼎冠军,并打破了学校纪录,成了运动场上最亮的星。比赛一结束,全班同学冲向他们的英雄,把他们抛向空中,热泪盈眶,欢呼声响彻操场。多么令人难以置信的感人景象倒装句

____________________________________________ the relay race. _________________for the class, the athletes of our class trained hard every day. While competing, they ____________ each other on the field, __________ one opponent after another, _________________________ to the limit, and finally ________________________and ______________________, _______ (become) the brightest stars on the field. ____________________the game was over, the whole class _____________to their heroes and ____________________ with_________________________ and________________________ the playground. ___________________________________!

在比赛中,每个参加者都发挥出了最好的水平。他们克服困难,艰苦奋斗以实现目标。然而,最让我吃惊的是一个男孩在1500米比赛中摔倒了。发令枪一响,他就自信地跑在前面。在只剩100米的时候,他的腿抽筋了,摔倒在地。决心要完成比赛,他从地上站起来继续前进,结果又跌倒了。满头大汗的他再次挣扎着站了起来,一步一步摇摇晃晃地走向终点线,赢得了雷鸣般的掌声和经久不息的欢呼声。 (用非谓语/定语从句)

During the game, each attendee performed their best.They _____________________ and fought hard to ____________ _______________. _________________________________, however, was a boy _________________ in the 1500m race.When the starting gun________________, he ran __________________ in front. With only 100metres to go,his legs cramped up and _________. __________________, he rose from the ground and continued on, only ________( fall )again. _____________(soak) in sweat, he ____________________________________, ________(sway) his way to the finish line step by step, _______________________________________________ ____________________.

结尾段:感想(回扣主题)

正是这个男孩顽强的毅力和无畏的精神帮助他赢得了掌声。赢得比赛固然值得赞扬,但那些不轻言放弃的人也深深地触动了我,并将对我的学习和生活产生很大的影响。(强调句) 

_____________ the boy's dogged perseverance and fearless spirit _________________________ __________________. _______(win) competitions is certainly _____________________, but those_________________________ also deeply touch me and ________________________ ___________________________________________________. 

我们度过了多么难忘的时光啊! 除了比赛的刺激, 在比赛中体现出来的同学们之间的团结、合作和体育精神是最让我感动的东西。

What a memorable time we had! _________________ the excitement of the game, the _______ (unite), ___________ (cooperate) and sportsmanship among the students ___________ (reflect) in the game is __________________________. 

参考范文

What Touched Me Most In School Sports Meeting

With numerous outstanding athletes making their debuts(首次登台)  in the star-studded (众星云集的)sports meeting, many memorable moments were captured and etched in my mind(刻骨铭心), among which the 3000-meter race touched me most.

Despite the severe weather(尽管天气恶劣), all the fearless warriors participating in the tough race were determined to forge a path to success (开拓成功之路) and achieve their ultimate goals(实现他们的最终目标). What raised my eyebrows most, however, was a boy left behind. Soaked in sweat, he gradually overcame the obstacles (跨越障碍) and eventually made it, which won him thunderous applause and ever-lasting shout. 

It was the boy's arduous resilience (艰巨的韧性) and relentless efforts( 不懈努力) that instilled him with energy (给他灌输能量) and helped him surpass his limits(超越自己的极限). Success is not guaranteed, but what defines a true successful man is his unceasing efforts (持续努力) to pursue his dream.

优秀学生作文

What Touched Me Most In School Sports Meeting

I'm greatly honored to have the chance to participate in the Sports meeting, in which I made a true friend and it was this girl as well as her deeds that touched me deeply.

Having won many medals in junior high school, I was confident about running. When I stood on the track with confidence, I even didn’t notice the little girl standing beside me.But beyond my expectation, I fell down suddenly. My world was falling apart.To my amazement, the girl stopped and reached her hand to me. She comforted me and tried to pull me up. “Don’t give up and let’s finish it together!” she smiled. I wanted to decline her kind offer. Equally amazing was that she led me to the finish line, which touched my bottom of heart and inspired me a lot.

No words can express my gratitude to the girl, whose sportsmanship will touch me forever.

Homework:

1.(2023.5嵊州二模应用文活动报道)

假定你是李华,是校英语报的记者。上周末你校组织了春季运动会,请你用英语写一篇报道,内容包括:1.赛前准备; 2.精彩瞬间;   3.活动意义。

注意:1.词数80左右; 2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。

Spring Sports Meet Successfully Held

2. 一段式续写: 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头续写,使之构成一片完整的短文。                                                                                           

In the sport of track and field, athletes compete not only with one another but against themselves, and with each race they try to achieve a new personal best.

As a student in Omaha Burke High School, Blake Cerveny was running in a race. Aiming to beat his own personal record, after a fast start, he continued to push himself hard. He had been training hard and was the recorder keeper so he had enough confidence to beat anyone else. However, with less than 400 meters to go, Cerveny's legs cramped (抽筋)up and failed him. “Ouch!That hurts!” he exclaimed, frowning. Determined to finish, Cerveny lifted himself painfully to his feet and continued on, only to fall again after another 150 meters. Concerned, his coach rushed to him and asked him if he wanted to stop. He shook his head and said,“I can make it!”. With great effort, Cerveny pulled himself up and with an unsteady pace, moved forward for one final push. Unfortunately, it wasn't enough. Less than 100 meters from the finish line,he lay curled on the ground. His legs had simply given out.

Before Cerveny's coach could reach him, Brandon Schutt,who followed him closely offered a helping hand.

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