When Devon's sister, Lil, went off to college, Devon's stomach felt all twisty. Then Mom said that Kapil, a high-school student from India, would be staying in their house and living in Lil's room, for they were the host family. The piece of news made Devon's stomach feel worse, as he missed his sister so much. "What if I can't understand him?" Devon asked. "He speaks English well," Mom said.
On Kapil's first day, he exchanged some small talk with Devon before disappearing into his new room. Lil's room, Devon reminded himself. As days went on, Kapil started spending more time in the rest of the house. He was in the kitchen a lot, whose cooking always filled the air with steam and spice that made Devon's eyes water. "Smells wonderful!" Mom exclaimed. When Lil called a few days later, Devon told her about Kapil's cooking, "Lucky! I love Indian food!" Lil said. "But it seems too spicy for me," replied Devon.
One day, Mom had to work late. "Kapil will stay with you until I get home," she explained.
Devon's stomach twisted. Lil had always stayed with him when Mom had to work late.
When Devon got home from school, Kapil greeted him at the door. "Would you like à snack?" Kapil asked. Devon shrugged. Lil and he used to cook together after school, which they called "making messes." Kapil opened the refrigerator. "How about a yogurt?" "I had one at breakfast," responded Devon in a cold voice. Kapil opened a cupboard and smiled. "Wait here." He returned with a package. "I 'lI cook an Indian snack," he announced. Kapil pulled out a round, thin cracker the size of a small Frisbee, poured oil into a pan and fried the cracker. Then the kitchen was filled with spicy smells. After a while, Kapil handed Devon a plate with the sizzling pancake on it. “Papadum(印度薄饼),” he said. “Made from bean flour.”
1.续写词数应为 300左右；
Para1: Devon's stomach twisted again.
Para2: Looking at the empty plate, Devon said to Kapil, "Let's make messes!"
一、设计理念：
1. 本文人物： 主角：Devon Indian high school student Kapil
配角：Devon’s sister Lil ； mom ( 可以几乎不写) 但如果第二段写妈妈下班回家后发现两个人处的很好，也可以在构思情节的时候设计进去。
2. 原文故事简介：Devon 因姐姐上大学难过，姐姐的房间被Kapil占了，他更难过；因此对Kapil 怎么也热爱不起来，包括Kapil 在厨房做的带辛辣味的印度菜。有一天妈妈不能准时下班，Kapil 负责照顾Devon 并马上给Devon 做了印度飞饼。
3. 本文续写思路：
①结合所给的两个段首句：推知第一段内容为：不愿意尝试飞饼---尝试飞饼----吃完飞饼, 合理安排Devon 和Kapil 之间的互动，心理活动描写以及动作描写。
②结合第二段首句，推知第一段应该吃完飞饼；从原文故事可知姐姐Lil在家时，姐弟俩经常在家里捣鼓吃的东西，且称之为making messes. Kapil 刚住进来不久，应该不知道make messes 的实际意思。所以一定要写Devon 向Kapil 解释。
3. 第二段写两人在厨房捣鼓印度食物，并在此期间友谊的小船开始扬帆起航。
二、教学过程
Step1: Analyze characters
Main roles: Devon Kapil
Minor role: Devon’s sister Lil , Mom
Step2: Analyze the plot of the story
① Devon’s problem --- he missed his sister and Kapil occupied Lil’s room.
② Kapil was good at cooking Indian food.
③ Devon’s mother came back home late.
④ Kapil took care of Devon after school.
Step4: Design plots for each paragraph
Para1:
①How did Mom react? What did she say to me?
②How did I feel? What did I do? How did we make joint efforts to prepare for the coming cooking competition?
③What happened to the papadum ?
Para2:
①How did Devon explain “make messes”?
②What did Devon say to Kapil to invite him to make messes? How did Kapil feel? What did Kapil do together with Devon?
③How did their relation change?
Step 5: Appreciate possible version.
Para1: Devon's stomach twisted again.
The overwhelmingly spicy smell of the papadum went straight into his nostrils, making Devon’s eyes water. His mind filled with doubts and unease, he was not sure if he could handle the hot papadum. But all of a sudden, “ Lucky! I love Indian food” echoed in his ears. Staring at the still-sizzling pancake, Devon summoned up all his courage to pick it up, took a deep breath and had a tiny bite. What stunned him was that Kapil’s thin pancake didn’t taste like cardboard. Instead, it exploded in his mouth like numerous little flavor bombs. Every taste bud on his tongue awakened, Devon wolfed it down, exclaiming, “ I love Indian food just as my sister does!”
Para2: Looking at the empty plate, Devon said to Kapil, "Let's make messes!" “What?” Kapil asked in puzzlement, eyes wide open. Noticing confusion etched on Kapil’s face, Devon grinned from ear to ear, explaining briefly that his sister Lil and he used to cook together after school and how much he missed her. Vivid memories of cooking with Lil crowding in, Devon begged Kapil with watery eyes, “Can we make food together?” Moved and determined to act as a big brother, Kapil nodded, eyes sparkling with joy and anticipation. Smiling at each other, they charged into the kitchen, rummaged through the cupboard，searched for the ingredients and cooked Devon and Lil’s dishes and spicy Indian food together. Ice between Devon and Kapil melting, Devon embarked on a new journey of making messes with Kapil and a “spicy” friendship began to bloom.
友谊素材
1.Ice between Devon and Kapil melting, Devon embarked on a new journey of making messes with Kapil and a “spicy” friendship began to bloom.
2. With each attempt at Indian cuisine, their friendship bonded by a papadum grew increasingly strong and close/ intimate.
3.A seed of a beautiful friendship was sown unknowingly in our hearts despite our distinct differences in hobbies.
4. In the kitchen filled with steam and spice, the aroma of Indian food cooked by Kapil was like an invisible hand, slowly beginning to knock on the door of friendship in Devon’s heart.
动作描写之所说 （ “口” 发出的动作）：
1.Every taste bud on his tongue awakened, Devon wolfed it down, exclaiming, “ I love Indian food just as my sister does!” （ 惊叹）
2. Looking into her tearful eyes, Mom comforted her in a soft voice/ tone, “ Don’t worry! Let’s go back to the cinema to find your phone. ( 柔声安慰）
3.“What?” Kapil asked in confusion, eyes wide open. ( 问）
4.Trapped in the lift car and feeling extremely desperate, I screamed for help at the top of my lungs, hoping someone could hear me and send rescue to us. ( 高声呼救）
5. Seeing David cross the finish line, all the audience cheered up and applauded enthusiastically , moved by David unique perseverance and courage. ( 喝彩）
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