2025-12 金丽衢读后续写
A GREAT HELP ON GRANDMA”S LITTLE FARM
Nala loved spending her school holidays on Grandma’s little farm! But this time, her granny was so sick, and couldn’t get out of bed!
“Don’t worry,” Nala told her granny, “I’ll look after everything!” She knew how to feed all the animals: it was easy! The chickens and ducks had pellets(丸). The horse had oats(燕麦). There was plenty of grass for the four sheep and the goat.
She could also water the vegetables and collect eggs from the chicken coop.
“What a great help you are,” Grandma said when Nala brought her a bowl of soup for lunch. “It’s no trouble!” Nala smiled.
“I’ll have to get up soon,” Grandma sighed. “Nanny will need milking.” Nanny the goat had to be milked every day. In fact, she would come outside and bleat (咩咩叫) when it was time! But Nala thought that her granny still looked pale and shaky......
“I can do it!” Nala said confidently. She hadn’t tried milking yet, but she had watched Grandma closely! Grandma would always put on her special dress and straw hat, get the bucket from the tool shed(棚), get Nanny to the milking shed, and get everything done.
When Nanny bleated to be milked, Nala went out to see her. She expected the goat to follow her to the milking shed like she did with Grandma, but the animal just stood there.
“Come on, Nanny,” Nala said. “I’m milking you today. Grandma’s sick, so we have to work together.”
Nanny just bleated impatiently, moving her feet uncomfortably.
“Maybe I need to speak more firmly,” Nala thought. “Now listen, Nanny. I want you to follow me to the milking shed, right now!” But Nanny trotted away across the yard!
“Hey, come back here!” Nala called. Nanny stopped and turned around. She didn’t like this little stranger. Grandma never yelled at her!
Para1:At that moment Nala had a think.
Para2:Just then, she spotted Grandma’s dresses and the straw hat hanging over a chair.
一、设计理念：
1. 本文人物：主角：Nala, Nanny
配角：Granny ( 可写：放在第二段写比较合理，Nala 完成挤奶工作后，奶奶的欣慰与喜悦。着重Nala自己独自解决问题，完成任务以及自己从挤奶这件事情中的个人感悟和所得) 。
2. 原文故事简介：Granny 生病，Nala 假期里去农场帮忙。这次的任务是帮忙给Nanny 挤奶。结果Nanny 不愿意。
3. 本文续写思路：
①结合所给的两个段首句：推知第一段内容为： Nala得想办法把Nanny 带到milking shed。这里有两种思路。一种是用草或者燕麦哄骗Nanny 未果；另一种是用草或者燕麦哄骗Nanny 到了milking shed, 但是Nanny 拒绝让Nala 挤奶。
②结合第二段首句，推知第一段应该Nala 打扮成奶奶的模样，顺利地完成工作。人与羊之间的互动可以用拟人的方式贯穿整个续写篇章。
二、教学过程
Step1: Analyze characters
Main roles: Nala, Nanny
Minor role: Granny
Step2: Analyze the plot of the story
① Nanny needed milking but Granny was too sick to do the job
② Nanny refused to go to the milking shed
Step4: Design plots for each paragraph
Para1: Para1:At that moment Nala had a think.
Link1: What was the think( idea)? How did Nala feel?
Body: What did Nala do? How did Nanny react?
Link2: What was the result? How did Nala feel?
Para2: Para2:Just then, she spotted Grandma’s dresses and the straw hat hanging over a chair.
Link1: What did Nala do then? How did she feel?
Body: How did Nanny respond to Nala? How did Nala accomplish milking ?
Ending: ①How was the relationship between Nala and Nanny now?
② What lesson did Nala learn from the experience?
Possible Version
Para1:At that moment Nala had a think.
As she glanced at the lush grass, a brilliant idea hit her like a bolt of lightning! “Grass!” she exclaimed, eyes sparkling with thrill! Nala flew towards the meadow, selected the most tender and juicy grass , grabbed a significant bunch and zoomed across the farm to the still-bleating goat. What disappointed Nala most was that Nanny turned a blind eye to the feast! Nala’s painstaking efforts ended up in failure! She was at her wit’s end ! Nanny still froze on her spot, staring at Nala in a suspicious way and bleating increasingly impatiently. “Nanny only trusts granny. ” Nala sighed heavily with a sinking heart, looking around blankly.
Para2:Just then, she spotted Grandma’s dresses and the straw hat hanging over a chair.
A spark of hope was reignited in Nala’s heart! Without any hesitation, Nala dashed to the chair, grabbed Grandma’s dresses and the straw hat and put them on as quickly as possible. Now Nala looked like a small version of her Granny! Seeing the familiar figure approaching, Nanny breathed a sigh of relief , following Nala to the milking shed and bleating merrily. “ Please be well-behaved, Nanny.” Nala soothed the goat , stroking her head softly and patiently. The milking process went extremely smoothly, filling her heart with an overwhelming sense of achievement. When Nala turned up in her granny’s bedroom with a bucket of milk, Granny cracked a radiant smile on her pale wrinkled face, giving Nala a thumbs-up for being a great help.
续写微技能之各种说 （接续湖丽衢联考读后续写：辛辣友谊 ）：
1. 咕哝着说 murmur
2.结结巴巴说 stutter
3.宣告：announce/declare
4. 保证：promise/assure/ guarantee
5. 建议：advise /propose/suggest；
6. 恳请 plead / beg / appeal to
7. 问与答：ask，answer回答/reply回复 / replied in a calm voice
8. 喊叫：cry out /call /
9. 大喊shout/yell
10. 尖叫scream
11. 惊叫（因高兴、痛苦、惊讶等的喊叫）exclaim
12. 发出特别响地声音 let out a surprisingly loud voice
13. 声嘶力竭地大叫shout at the top of one’s lungs / voice
14. 补充说道add
15. 继续说道 continue
16. 解释道explain
17. 陈述道state；
18. 抗议道protest
19. 哭诉道sob
20. 同意地说agree
21. 安慰道comfort /soothe/ console
22. 询问 inquire
23. 叹息道 sigh
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