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Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination, but others think there are more important factors like money and appearance. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

三月中旬，乍暖还寒之际，V的第66篇，也和大家讨论分享一下高分的Essay范文语料，适用于目标托福110+，以及追求剑桥CAE CPE和雅思8分的同学。什么叫“成功”，什么叫“幸福”，具体还是因人而异，不过学习和事业的成就感，以及健康的状态是V老师个人希望学生们追求的。国际教育也要为人师表，但不是“好为人师”

While some individuals extol the virtues of industrious work and unwavering resolve as the primary vehicles towards achieving personal milestones, others hold fast to the allure of material possessions and aesthetic appeal. This dichotomy, as it appears to me, fails to encapsulate the entirety of the human experience, thus rendering it overly simplistic to exalt one perspective over the other without a thorough examination of all influencing factors.

The presumption that industry and determination solely pave the road to professional success is, in my view, a reductionist approach. Certainly, this sentiment is deeply rooted within the psyche of the less privileged, who often rely on these attributes as their primary tools for aspiration and advancement. However, this perspective neglects the unique concerns of those residing within the affluent echelons of society, many of whom are not burdened with the same fears over basic sustenance or the pressing need to fulfill lifelong ambitions. Consequently, it is unreasonable to anticipate that individuals blessed with prosperity would share the same values or perspective as those grappling with the dual stressors of sustenance and career progression.

However, the fact that those of a higher socioeconomic status may not value hard work as highly does not automatically elevate the importance of wealth and physical appearance above other qualities. The crux of this debate lies in the nebulous nature of the term 'more important' – a descriptor that resists a universally accepted definition and instead finds its true meaning within specific domains and contexts. While personal wealth and physical attractiveness undeniably act as significant metrics for securing a coveted spot in the Forbes list, a closer examination of the narratives beneath the glossy magazine covers reveals the enduring presence of traditional values at the core of these success stories – values such as tenacity, a strong work ethic, and resilience in the face of adversity.

In synthesis, it is my assertion that any attempt to overemphasize the role of either hard work or materialism, while disregarding contextual factors, results in an oversimplified and myopic understanding of human motivations and success.

写作高分词汇

Aesthetic appeal   审美吸引力

Deeply rooted   深深植根

Unwavering resolve   坚定的决心

Primary vehicles   主要手段

Overly simplistic   过于简单化

Thorough examination   彻底检查

Dual stressors   双重压力

Socioeconomic status   社会经济地位

Nebulous nature   模糊的性质

Enduring presence   持久的存在

Strong work ethic   强烈的职业道德

Resilience in the face of adversity   面对逆境的韧性

Overemphasize the role   过分强调角色

Oversimplified and myopic   过于简化和短视

Human motivations   人类动机

Professional success   职业成功

Personal milestones   个人里程碑