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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The stage lights in the music hall darkened, as the next school’s concert band settled onstage. The First Chair, a young violinist, called upon each section to play, tuning them with precision and grace. The moment the musical director appeared, a wave of applause filled the air.The annual High School Music Festival was the highlight of my year. As a music teacher, I never missed a session, always amazed by the extraordinary talents the musical directors inspired in their students. But this year might be my last visit. With age catching up, my desire for retirement was growing stronger.Honestly, there was always a touch of dissatisfaction and envy in my heart as I watched these school bands, because I had never been able to develop a band to this level. I taught in a small primary school. My students played beginner music, and they were happy when we managed to play from the start all the way to the end of a piece, with all the instruments finishing together. The complexities of full tone, dynamic control, and balance were beyond their abilities.As the band opened with their first piece, the striking sound of violins, accompanied by the lively notes of pianos, set my heart pounding. Wouldn't it be great to be the musical director for one of these massive high school bands? I thought as the music transported me. When the last notes rang out, there was a brief silence before thunderous applause erupted. My aging eyes scanned (察看) the stage, seeking familiar faces among the performers. But my vision was no longer sharp enough to recognize anyone.During the tea break, I headed toward the entrance hall. “Miss Jones!” a young man’s voice cut through the crowd. I recognized the concert uniform he was wearing. It was the very violinist I had been admiring. Puzzled, I searched his face for familiar features. It turned out to be Bradley, a former student of mine who was difficult to forget. Schoolwork had been hard for him, and he had struggled through all his subjects. It was a pleasant surprise to meet him here. We sat down and had a chat.Paragraph 1: I remembered the day when he asked to join the school band.
Paragraph 2: I was still smiling as I made my way back to the music hall.
这篇续写讲述了一位即将退休的音乐老师参加年度高中音乐节的经历。音乐会开始时，乐队的指挥和学生们精湛的演奏让他感到既羡慕又失落，因为他自己在小学校教授初级音乐，无法培养出如此高水平的乐队。在音乐会中，他被一位年轻的小提琴手布莱德利的表现所吸引。在茶歇期间，他意外遇到了布莱德利，发现布莱德利曾是他的小学生，尽管当时学习成绩不佳，但通过音乐找到了自己的热情和方向。两人坐下来聊天，让他重新感受到教育的成就感和音乐的力量。音乐老师（叙述者）
作为一名音乐老师，他每年都不缺席音乐节，对学生的才华和音乐的热爱令人钦佩。尽管热爱教学，但随着年龄增长，他对退休的渴望也在增强。同时，他对自己未能培养出高水平乐队感到些许不满和羡慕。遇到昔日学生布莱德利后，回忆起过去的教学经历，感受到教育带来的满足感和自豪。布莱德利
虽然在学校时期学习成绩不佳，但他在音乐上展现出极大的热情和毅力，通过不懈的练习成为出色的小提琴手。从一个在学业上挣扎的学生，成长为音乐会中的主角，体现了他在音乐中的自我发现和成长。多元主题分析
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【几个写作误区】
1. 续段1只写了主人公纠结是否让Bradley加入小学乐队，没有写Bradley后续在音乐道路上的成长和进步；3.第二段写了Bradley上去表演，实则已经演出完毕【几个重点场景】语料句
Ⅰ. 续段1的回忆
Bradley was hesitant at first, unsure if he could keep up with the others. His hands shook slightly as he held the violin, but there was a spark in his eyes that told me he was determined.Bradley had approached me with a shy, hopeful expression, clutching his violin case as if it held his dreams. "Miss Jones," he had said, "I want to play music. I want to be part of something bigger than myself."His eyes sparkled with a determination that was hard to ignore. Despite his academic struggles, his passion for music was evident. I had my doubts, considering the level of proficiency required for our small school band, but I saw something in him that I couldn't dismiss.I took him under my wing, spending extra afternoons helping him practice scales and encouraging him to find his rhythm.Slowly but surely, his confidence grew. By the end of the semester, Bradley was not only keeping up but also inspiring his peers with his dedication and newfound passion for music.Ⅱ.续段2音乐厅的场景描绘
As I re-entered the hall, the sounds of rehearsals filled the air, reminding me of the countless hours I had spent nurturing young talent.The hall now felt different, filled with notes that seemed to carry the heartbeat of every student I’d taught.Ⅲ.续段2 “我”的个人体会和感悟
I realized how much Bradley had achieved since his days in my primary school band. His success was a reminder of perseverance and the impact a teacher can have on a student's life.Perhaps retirement wasn't the end I had envisioned, but rather the beginning of a new chapter where I could cherish these moments and continue to support music education in whatever capacity I could.I felt a renewed sense of pride and fulfillment, knowing that even in my small corner of the world, I had made a difference.![]()
