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素颜版 I’m Wanglei from grade twelve. On seeing the newly-released poster of campus ambassador recruitment, I’ve noticed something really disappointing，so my perspectives are elaborated as follows.
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| Upon seeing the newly-released poster for the campus ambassador recruitment, I felt compelled to share some thoughts and suggestions. |
素颜版 From my viewpoint, the standard had better extend towards a bigger capacity, involving personal achievements, character, morality, ambition and so on.
根据C原则修改后
| From my perspective, it would be beneficial to broaden the selection process to include personal achievements, character, morality, ambition, and other qualities. This approach would ensure that every student in the school has the opportunity to participate, rather than feeling excluded by the current focus on physical appearance. More importantly, the role of an ambassador is to convey the school's values and spirit. |
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