不过老外的存款状况
可能会让你大开眼界👇
最低的小哥居然是零?!
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详细了解老外的存款数字
想过你的存款目标在哪个段位吗?
(数据来自2021年)
不同年龄
每人平均存款和中位数存款
加拿大2023年
高于中位数的你
存那么多钱到底图啥?
是为了孩子上学还是父母养老?
低于中位数的你
有没有想过
为什么存钱对你来说不重要?
这些问题
其实和雅思写作的经典话题
Some people think it is important to save money.
Do you agree or disagree?
完美契合!
题目来自最新剑桥19Test 3
看看这个官方范文
写了8个段落
观点: 存钱重要与否,全看你的人生优先级: 享受派: 活在当下最重要,存钱?不存在的 规划派: 买房、养家、医疗,这些都需要钱,当然得存
储蓄在生活中各方面都很重要,无论年纪大小都需要用钱
Young people are often full of enthusiasm about their future. They are looking forward to their first job, to meeting new people or to getting to know as much of the world as they can. Many tend to live in the present rather than in the future so that they don’t always plan ahead.
年轻人刚开始工作或者探索生活的时候,通常喜欢活在当下,不太会计划未来
所以存钱这事儿经常被忽视
When people get older and settle down they realize that buying a house, starting a family or caring for your health takes up a good considerable amount of money and everybody who began saving money in younger years is glad to have done so. However, saving money is not always possible. Sometimes unforeseen expenses cannot be avoided, life situations are suddenly changing or there is never even enough money available even for the most necessary things.
年纪大了才发现,大笔开销比如买房、生孩子、看病都需要钱
早存钱的人肯定更踏实,但有时候生活的不确定性会让存钱变得很难
So how could you save money for the future in this case? In general, you have to ask yourself what your priorities in life are. What are the things you cherish most? Is it more important for you to plan ahead or do you prefer to just enjoy the moment that you live in?
要不要存钱其实看你更在乎什么,有的人觉得计划未来重要,有的人觉得及时行乐更值
Everybody has to make own choices and to consider what is really essential for him or herself.
每个人都需要决定对自己生活来说最重要的是什么
In any age taking a moment to reflect on your life and looking back at the things you have already done is always a good thing to do.
在任何年龄,花点时间回顾自己的生活是个好事情
If you know yourself well and all about the things that really make you happy you will be able to make the right decisions in financial issues as well as life other areas in life.
如果你清楚自己真正想要的幸福是什么,就能在理财和其他生活决策上做出正确选择
In what way money plays an important role will be easy to be found out then. Perhaps you need less than you first thought years ago.
最后会明白,钱没那么重要,但手头有点存款还是安心
官方评语:
翻译官方评语:
为什么这篇文章虽然语言“简单”
但仍然是Band 7的作文?
观点清晰,逻辑清楚
充分回答了题目要求
文章完全回答了题目
讨论了存钱是否重要的两种观点(赞成和反对)
文章重点发展了关键观点
例如:年轻人存钱的困难,以及年龄增长后优先事项的变化
这些内容都进行了详细阐述
多样的句子结构
运用了多种句式
比如条件句 ("If")、比较句 ("rather than") 和复合句来让论点更有层次感
尽管存在一些小错误(例如 "own choices" 应为 "their own choices";"be found out"* 应为 "be found")
但这些并不影响整体理解
有效的词汇
像 "full of enthusiasm"(充满热情)、"settle down"(安定下来)、"unforeseen expenses"(不可预见的开销) 和 "tend to live in the present"(倾向于活在当下)
这样的搭配非常恰当且自然
这些词汇提升了表达的流利度
无需依赖复杂生僻的词语
改进建议
结尾部分如果能总结主要观点
而不是提出新的建议,会更加有说服力
文章后半部分的段落划分稍显不一致
可以调整得更规范一些
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