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Unit8高分写作点拨


Unit 8 Once Upon a Time. (话题写作指导)

【话题分析】

讲故事

本单元的话题是“讲故事”,与此相关的写作任务是能正确运用一般过去时讲述简单的故事。写作时常用 once upon a time开头,要注意动词过去式的变化。

常用句型:

Here's...by...

Once upon a time/Long ago, there was/liveda/an...

My favourite story is...

I like the story because...

【写作实例】

“龟兔赛跑”是我们从小就耳熟能详的故事,请你根据以下提示写一个70词左右的小故事。 

提示词语:race赛跑wake up 醒来fall asleep入睡tortoise乌龟rabbit兔子 the finishing line 终点线
________________________

【思路点拨】

【教材典句】

1.Once upon a time, an emperor liked clothes very much.(SA,2a)

2.People praised the clothes at first.(SA,2b)

3.But only clever people can see them.(SA,2a)

【经典范文】

Once upon a time, there lived a tortoise and a rabbit in the forest.One day, they decided to have a race.Lots of animals came to watch.At first , the rabbit was much faster than the tortoise.The rabbit thought the tortoise was too slow, and she could win easily.So she decided to have a break.Then ,she fell asleep.The tortoise was slower, buthe didn't stop.When the rabbit woke up, she ran very fast but it was too late.She didn't get to the finishing line before the tortoise.

【亮点点评】

①用 once upon a time 开头讲述故事。

②讲述故事时恰当运用了 at first 和 then,使文章连续性更强。

③恰当使用but 连接句子,说明乌龟虽然慢但不放弃。

【同步检测】

1.假如你校校刊正在举办英语故事征文比赛。请你根据下面的提示, 以”The ugly duckling”为题, 用英语写一篇80词左右的英语短文参加比赛。

提示: 
(1)丑小鸭被兄弟姐妹嘲笑, 农场里的其他动物也不愿和他做朋友; 
(2)他离开家, 差点死于饥饿(hunger)和寒冷(cold); 
(3)春天来了, 他遇到了一群天鹅(swan), 并且意识到自己也是一只美丽的天鹅; 
(4)故事给我们的启示。
_________________________

【参考范文】

The ugly duckling

Once upon a time, there was an ugly duckling.Because he was different from his sisters and brothers, no one liked him on the farm.His sisters and brothers often laughed at him and other animals didn’t want to make friends with him.He left home and became homeless.He nearly died of hunger and cold in winter.When spring arrived, he met lots of swans.He tried to join them and finally realized he became a beautiful swan.
From the story, we learn that we should believe in ourselves and never give up.

【详解】[总体分析]

①题材:本文是一篇记叙文。讲述的是丑小鸭的故事;

②时态:时态为“一般过去时”

③提示:写作信息点已经给出,并且根据时间线进行,注意不可以缺失信息点,故事给我们的启示放在文章最后,注意从正面积极意义点题。

[写作步骤]

第一步,开门见山,点出文章主人公——丑小鸭,根据题目要求写出丑小鸭遇到的各种困难;

第二步,写出丑小鸭这个故事的精神内涵——不放弃,相信自己,不因外界的评价而迷失自我……

第三步,通读全文,注意文中时态为一般过去时,注意时间状语从句,宾语从句等固定句式的使用,修改文中有错误的地方。

[亮点词汇]

①be different from与……不同;

②died fo hunger and cold 死于饥饿和寒冷;

③believe in ourselves and never give up相信自己,永不放弃;

[高分句型]

①When spring arrived, he met lots of swans.(when引导的时间状语从句)

②He tried to join them and finally realized he became a beautiful swan.(宾语从句)

2.神话故事(fairy story)作为中国传统文化的一部分, 对于青少年了解民族文化及历史具有一定意义。假设English Daily网站中的Culture版块请你以“A Story I Know”为题,介绍一则神话故事及故事给你带来的影响和启发。

要求: 
(1)条理清晰,内容完整,语句通顺,书写工整; 
(2)文中请勿提及你的真实姓名和学校;
(3)不少于 80 词。
参考词汇:legend(n.传说);national(adj.民族的)

A Story I Know

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【参考范文】

A Story I Know

There are many traditional stories in China.My favorite story is “Chang’e Flying to the Moon”.Long long ago, Hou Yi got a special medicine from a goddess as a reward after he shot down nine suns.Peng Meng wanted to get it when Hou Yi was not home.To stop Peng Meng, Chang’e had to take it and she flew up to the moon.Hou Yi missed her so much that he became really sad every night.One night, he found that the moon was so bright and round that he saw his wife there.He quickly laid out her favorite fruits and desserts in the garden.
I really love this ancient mythology because it shows our strong desire for family reunion and love.

【详解】[总体分析]

①题材:本文是一篇话题作文;

②时态:时态为“一般现在时”,讲述故事用“一般过去时”;

③提示:写作要点已给出,考生应注意不要遗漏信息提示的内容,适当增加细节,并且突出写作的要点。

[写作步骤]

第一步,表明写作意图。直接说明要介绍什么故事;

第二步,具体阐述写作内容。重点介绍故事的内容;

第三步,书写结语。介绍故事给你带来的影响和启发。

[亮点词汇]

①special特别的

②reward报酬

③mythology神话

④family reunion家庭团聚

[高分句型]

①Long long ago, Hou Yi got a special medicine from a goddess as a reward after he shot down nine suns.(时间状语从句)

②Hou Yi missed her so much that he became really sad every night.(结果状语从句)

3.请根据下面的故事梗概,发挥想象力,以“Two little pigs”为题写一则小故事。

时间:从前
地点:森林里
人物:幸福的猪妈妈和两只小猪
情节:两只小猪长大了,猪妈妈决定让他们走出森林,到城市里看一看……
提示词:grow up长大
要求:60个词左右。开头句已给出,不计入总词数。

Two little pigs

Once upon a time, there were two little pigs ________________
...
So they returned to the forest and enjoyed their life.

【参考范文】

Two little pigs

Once upon a time, there were two little pigs.One was black and the other was white.They lived happily with their mother in the forest.When they grew up, their mother decided to let them go out of the forest and look around the city.And then they left home with some food.When they arrived in the city, they noticed people in the city were not really happy.
So they returned to the forest and enjoyed their life.

【详解】[总体分析]

①题材:本文是一篇材料作文;

②时态:时态为“一般过去时”;

③提示:写作要点已给出,要求根据提示内容进行写作,适当添加细节,并突出写作重点。

[写作步骤]

根据故事梗概,结合文章的开头和结尾,写符合情景的小故事。

[亮点词汇]

①in the forest 在森林里

②decide to do sth 决定做某事

③look around 环顾四周

④arrive in 到达

[高分句型]

①When they grew up, their mother decided to let them go out of the forest and look around the city.(when引导的时间状语从句)

②When they arrived in the city, they noticed people in the city were not really happy.(when引导的时间状语从句。

【真题链接】

1.同学们,守株待兔是我们非常熟悉的古代寓言故事。请你试着用英语写下来,寄给《21世纪英语》杂志社,传播中国故事,让世界上更多的人了解中国文化。

要求:(1)根据提示写句子,可适当发挥,使故事流畅;
(2)不要出现考生本人信息;
(3)不少于70词。
参考词汇:树桩 stump,农作物 crops
Once upon a time, there was a farmer.Every day. _____________
...

【参考范文】

Once upon a time there was a farmer.Every day they could only have enough food to eat and enough clothing to wear.
One day, when he was doing farm work in the field, a scared hare ran out.It bumped a stump and died.He picked it up.That day, he ate his fill.
From that day on, he no longer went in for farming again.From morning till night, he stayed by that stump, waiting for miracles to take place again.

【详解】[总体分析]

①题材:本文是一篇看图作文;

②时态:时态为“一般过去时”;

③提示:写作要点已给出,考生应注意围绕题图和“信息提示”写出“守株待兔”这个寓言故事。

[写作步骤] 

第一步,介绍故事的主人公;

第二步,讲述故事发生的经过;

第三步,讲述故事的结果。

[亮点词汇] 

① pick up 拾起

② no longer 不再

③ take place 发生 

[高分句型] 

① From morning till night, he stayed by that stump, waiting for miracles to take place again.(使用非谓语动词)

② One day in late autumn, when he was doing farm work in the field, a scared hare ran out.(使用when引导时间状语从句)

2.你听过《狐狸和葡萄》的故事吗?请根据下面的图片和提示词,用五句话简明扼要地跟大家分享这个故事。  

要求:所写句子必须和图片内容相关。
________________________________

【参考范文】

One hot summer’s day, a fox was hungry and thirsty when he saw some grapes.The grapes looked so delicious that he wanted to eat them very much.So he jumped and jumped.But the grapes were high, he couldn’t reach some.Finally, he had to give up and said “I am sure the grapes are sour.”

【详解】[总体分析]

①题材:本文是一篇看图作文;

②时态:时态为“一般过去时”;

③提示:考生根据图片上的内容描写,适当添加细节,并突出写作重点。

[写作步骤]

第一步,总述图片上的内容;

第二步,具体介绍图片上狐狸的行为;

第三步,介绍结果。

[亮点词汇]

①have to give up不得不放弃

②be sure确定

[高分句型]

①The grapes looked so delicious that he wanted to eat them very much.(so...that引导的结果状语从句)

3.从前,森林里住着狐狸妈妈和小狐狸。有一天小狐狸饿了,狐狸妈妈去给他找食物,后来发生了什么事呢?妈妈去了山里的一个村子,终于找到了食物。它拿着葡萄(grapes),赶快往家跑,快到家时,它听到了猎狗(hunting dog)的叫声,马上大声喊道:“孩子!快跑!”小狐狸听见妈妈的声音,它赶快跑进了山,结果狐狸妈妈被猎人(hunter)抓到杀死了。

请你根据以上所给情节,写篇70词左右的英语小作文。

【参考范文】

Once upon a time, there was a fox and her baby in the forest.One day the baby fox was very hungry and cried.Mother fox decided to get some food for her baby.So she went to a village in a mountain.She got some grapes and hurried to her house.When she was near the house, suddenly she heard the noises of the hunting dog.She realised the hunter was coming to kill her son.Mother fox shouted, “My dear son, it is dangerous.Run away.Be quick.”Baby fox ran away but Mother fox was caught and killed by the hunter.

【详解】本文需要写一则英文小故事,情节已经给出,重点的单词也相应给了出来,要注意在描述过去的事情的时候正确使用过去时态,可以用到的短语搭配表达有:Once upon a time曾经;decided to do决定去做;get some food for为…找一些食物;a village in a mountain大山里的一个小村庄;hurried to匆忙去…;near the house在房子附近;Run away跑掉。总体来说写作难度不大,重点是正确把握时态的应用,语句连贯,这篇范文完成了要求的写作任务。

4.假定你是学生李辉,即将参加学校英语社团组织的以“古代中国智慧故事”为主题的征文活动。请你根据以下提示写一篇英语文章参加比赛。

内容包括:
(1)司马光和小伙伴们玩耍;
(2)一个小伙伴掉进水缸(water tank)中;
(3)司马光砸破水缸救出小伙伴。
注意:
(1)词数80~100;
(2)可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
(3)文中不能出现真实姓名及学校名称。

Sima Guang broke the water tank

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【参考范文】

My name is Li Hui, and today want to share with you an ancient Chinese wisdom story about Sima Guang.
One day, Sima Guang and his friends were playing happily in a courtyard.Suddenly, one of his friends fell into a large water tank.The other children were so frightened that they didn’t know what to do next.But Sima Guang quickly looked around and saw a big stone nearby.He picked up the stone and hit the water tank hard.The tank broke.The water in it ran over soon and the boy was saved at last.
This story teaches us that in difficult situations, we should stay calm and think of clever solutions.

【详解】[总体分析]

①题材:本文是一篇材料作文;

②时态:时态以 “一般过去时”为主;

③提示:写作要点已给出,应注意不要遗漏“司马光砸缸”故事的介绍要点,可适当添加细节,并突出写作重点。

[写作步骤] 

第一步,表明写作意图,点明主题;

第二步,详细介绍司马光砸缸故事的前因后果;

第三步,书写结语。升华主题。

[亮点词汇]

①fall into跌入

②looked around环顾四周

③pick up拿起

④ran over溢出

[高分句型]

①The other children were so frightened that they didn’t know what to do next.(so...that引导的结果状语从句)

②The water in it ran over soon and the boy was saved at last.(and连接的并列句)

5.童话故事是世界文学宝库中的常青树,一直深受青少年的喜爱。你读过哪些童话故事?请你以“My favourite story”为题,讲述一下令你印象最深刻的一个童话故事。

提示:
(1)What’s the name of it?
(2)Who is in it?
(3)What’s the story?
(4)What do you think of it?
要求:
(1)词数80左右;
(2)条理清晰,语意连贯,句式规范。

My favourite story

_____________________

【参考范文】

My favourite story

I love reading and I have read many books.My favourite story is The Three Little Pigs.
There were three little pigs in the story.They built their own houses.The first built a straw house.The second built a house with wood.The third built a brick house.Then a wolf hit the straw house and the wooden house.But he couldn’t break down the brick house because it was too strong.At last, the third pig killed the wolf.
This is my favourite story because it is interesting and it teaches us to be hard-working.There are also many colourful pictures in the book.

【详解】[总体分析]

①题材:本文是一篇材料作文;

②时态:时态以“一般过去时”为主;

③提示:写作要点已给出,注意不要遗漏要点,可适当添加细节,并突出写作重点。

[写作步骤] 

第一步,开头点明主题,提出“我”喜欢的书;

第二步,具体阐述这本书的大概内容;

第三步,书写结语,表达读后感。

[亮点词汇] 

①At last最后

②teach sb.to do教某人做

③break down使倒塌

[高分句型]

But he couldn’t break down the brick house because it was too strong.(because引导的原因状语从句)


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