图画作文十二句作文法
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1如图所示 | Intuitively, this picture is incredibly compelling and enlightening, presenting a quite popular and resonant scenario in our increasingly globalized society. 直观上来看，这幅图片十分有说服力和有启发，呈现了一副十分普遍，且引起共鸣的场景，在我们这个日益全球化的社会中。 * resonant scenario 引起共鸣的场景 * in our increasingly globalized society 在我们这个日益全球化的社会中 |
2具体描述（人） | There be 主体, 方位, 动作. There is one boiling hotpot in the middle of the cartoon, with so many different things inside, such as Lao She, Kungfu, Bi Sheng, the Peking Opera, and so on. |
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4具体描述（字） | What impressed me the most is the caption under the picture, “cultural hotpot, both delicious and nutritious”, which is the finishing touch of the whole comic. | 图片下面的文字会写的时候。
What impressed me the most is the caption under the picture, which highlights the great importance of cultural integration. And in my opinion, it is the finishing touch of the whole comic. |
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5阐释意义 | 坦白讲，如果我们拘泥于图片表层的意思，我们将无法了解画家的真实意图。 Honestly, if we get stuck in the shallow meaning of the picture, we will fail to grasp the intention of the cartoonist. |
6人的意义 | 用图片中的（火锅）比喻现实中的（社会）。 After thoroughly looking over this picture, we can safely come to this conclusion that the painter tries to relate the hotpot in the picture to the society we are living in. * After thoroughly looking over this picture 仔细地看过这幅图片之后 * we can safely come to this conclusion 我们可以安全地得出这个结论 * the painter tries to relate A to B 画家试图将A和B联系起来 * the society we are living in 我们所生活的社会
After thoroughly looking over this picture, we can safely come to this conclusion that the painter tries to relate the hotpot in the picture to the society we are living in, with so many different cultures, trying to encourage people in real life to follow the practice of promoting cultural integration/diversity. * with so many different cultures 有各种各样的文化 * trying to encourage people in real life to follow the practice of doing sth. 试图鼓励现实中的人，践行doing sth的做法。| 积极正面话题 trying to encourage people in real life to follow the practice of promoting cultural integration/diversity. 试图鼓励现实中的人，促进文化多样性 * trying to encourage people in real life to discard the practice of doing sth. 试图鼓励现实中的人，摒弃doing sth的做法。| 负面话题
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7现象的意义 | The phenomenon is symbolically related what is going on in real world, which we should promote rather than discard. 这个现象，象征性地比喻了，现实世界正在经历的事情。我们应该促进，而不是摒弃。 |
8强调主题 | Clearly, it spares little effort for me to draw this conclusion that the cartoonist tries to bring the importance of cultural integration into limelight. * it spares little effort for me to do sth 我做某事，毫不费力 * draw this conclusion 得出这个结论 * bring sth into limelight 引起对某事的关注 * the importance of cultural integration 文化融合的重要性 |
给出评论段： | 1. 建议；2. 原因；3. 展望未来；4. 素材 |
9给出评论 | In short, cultural integration is crucial because it holds significant importance for leading a peaceful, inclusive and vibrant life. * hold significant importance for sth 对某事至关重要 * lead a peaceful, inclusive and vibrant life 和平的，包容的，有活力的生活 |
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Intuitively, this picture is incredibly compelling and enlightening, presenting a quite popular and resonant scenario in our increasingly globalized society. There is one boiling hotpot in the middle of the cartoon, with so many different things inside, such as Lao She, Kungfu, Bi Sheng, the Peking Opera, and so on. What impressed me the most is the caption under the picture, “cultural hotpot, both delicious and nutritious”, which is the finishing touch of the whole comic.
Honestly, if we get stuck in the shallow meaning of the picture, we will fail to grasp the intention of the cartoonist. After thoroughly looking over this picture, we can safely come to this conclusion that the painter tries to relate the hotpot in the picture to the society we are living in, with so many different cultures, trying to encourage people in real life to follow the practice of promoting cultural integration/diversity. The phenomenon is symbolically related what is going on in real world, which we should promote rather than discard. Clearly, it spares little effort for me to draw this conclusion that the cartoonist tries to bring the importance of cultural integration into limelight.
In short, cultural integration is crucial because it holds significant importance for leading a peaceful, inclusive and vibrant life.
精简版：
Intuitively, this picture is incredibly compelling and enlightening, presenting a quite popular and resonant scenario in our increasingly globalized society. There is one boiling hotpot in the middle of the cartoon, with so many different things inside, such as Lao She, Kungfu, Bi Sheng, the Peking Opera, and so on. What impressed me the most is the caption under the picture, “cultural hotpot, both delicious and nutritious”, which is the finishing touch of the whole comic.
Honestly, if we get stuck in the shallow meaning of the picture, we will fail to grasp the intention of the cartoonist. After thoroughly looking over this picture, we can safely come to this conclusion that the painter tries to relate the hotpot in the picture to the society we are living in, with so many different cultures, trying to encourage people in real life to follow the practice of promoting cultural integration/diversity. Clearly, it spares little effort for me to draw this conclusion that the cartoonist tries to bring the importance of cultural integration into limelight.
In short, cultural integration is crucial because it holds significant importance for leading a peaceful, inclusive and vibrant life.
两篇作文得分大概都在16分左右。是一个相对来说，投入产出比，比较高的得分。
里面80%的句子都是功能句，结合了一些图画的细节描述，还有一些小的拓展。
上课的时候讲到了一句话，给来听我写作课的同学。大致意思是：
接下来对于你们写作板块的得分，你们最需要做的事情就是两个：
保证框架功能句的部分是没有错误的。基础分数肯定就有了。
2. 尽量努力，自己添加的部分，是没有错误的。也就是细节的部分，没有问题，那么你就很有可能得到一个相对来说比较高的分数了。15~17分。再往上，18~20分，是需要绝对实力的，而且也需要运气的。不提倡，也不鼓励，目标要合理。
还是那句话，写作如何准备更高效呢？
应试写作 = 框架 + 功能句
功能句 + 细节 = 定制作文（满分作文）
不过，前提就是：写作就是不犯错，写作就是包含所有内容要点。
