2018 E1 邀请 + 信息
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小作文八句作文法
写作目的段： | |
1介绍 | 身份，代表组委会 On behalf of the organizing committee of the graduation ceremony, |
2目的 | 邀请 I am writing this letter with my full heart for the purpose of formally inviting each of you to attend the upcoming graduation ceremony. 邀请你参加，即将到来的毕业典礼。 ~ inviting you to attend the graduation ceremony |
完成提纲段： | |
3背景 | 毕业典礼很重要。 It is well known that the graduation ceremony matters profoundly for all students.
你们出现在毕业典礼上，对毕业生很重要。 It is well known that your presence at the ceremony matters profoundly for all the graduating students. |
4衔接 | 因此，邀请。 Thus, we would like to invite all of you to join us. 因此，我们想要邀请你们所有人，加入我们。 |
5提纲一 | 首先时间地点。 At the very beginning, it is going to be held in our school gym(auditorium), this Friday, from 2pm to 5pm. |
6提纲二 | 其次，除了时间地点外，其余信息，详情请见附件。 What’s more, besides the time and place mentioned above, the detailed arrangements are listed on the attachment. * besides the time and place mentioned above 除了以上提及的时间地点外 * the detailed arrangements are listed on the attachment 详细的安排，列在附件中 |
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感谢结尾段： | |
8感谢 | 回复 | 感谢。期待参加。 Thanks a lot for your attention to this invitation. We are looking forward to your coming. 感谢你对邀请函的关注。期待你们的到来。 If you have any further question, please feel free to contact me via the WeChat ID.
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Dear international experts,
On behalf of the organizing committee of the graduation ceremony, I am writing this letter with my full heart for the purpose of formally inviting each of you to attend the upcoming graduation ceremony.
It is well known that the graduation ceremony matters profoundly for all students. Thus, we would like to invite all of you to join us. At the very beginning, it is going to be held in our school gym(auditorium), this Friday, from 2pm to 5pm. What’s more, besides the time and place mentioned above, the detailed arrangements are listed on the attachment.
Thanks a lot for your attention to this invitation. We are looking forward to your coming.
Li Ming
参考译文：
亲爱的国际专家们：
我谨代表毕业典礼组委会，满怀诚挚地写下这封信，正式邀请各位参加即将举行的毕业典礼。
众所周知，毕业典礼对所有学生都意义重大。因此，我们诚挚地邀请大家参加我们的毕业典礼。首先，毕业典礼将于本周五下午 2 点至 5 点在我校体育馆（礼堂）举行。此外，除上述时间和地点外，详细安排见附件。
非常感谢您对本邀请函的关注。我们期待您的到来。
李明
写在后面：
这篇文章能够得多少分呢？7.5分。不论是水区还是旱区，7.5分是绝对没有问题的。绝对是高分作文，没有错误，内容完整。但是，没有办法成为满分档（9~10分），因为没有细节。
那么有没有办法，让这篇文章的分数，再提升一个档次呢？有办法。讲过的拓展方式之一，加细节。
我们把这句话：
What’s more, besides the time and place mentioned above, the detailed arrangements are listed on the attachment.
加一些细节，加细节的方式也很容易：
What’s more, besides the time and place mentioned above, the detailed arrangements, such as the program agenda, the dress code and seating arrangements, are listed on the attachment.
此外，除了上述的时间地点之外，附件中还列出了详细的安排，如活动议程、着装要求和座位安排等。
加了细节之后，这篇文章的得分，就可以至少在8.5分到9分了。这个就是写作能够得到的理想的极限分数了。
写作如何准备更高效呢？
应试写作 = 框架 + 功能句
功能句 + 细节 = 定制作文（满分作文）
不过，前提就是：写作就是不犯错，写作就是包含所有内容要点。
