My Room
四(5)班 周雅煜
教师评语
"Your essay about your room is vivid and engaging. You've described your surroundings in great detail, making it easy for readers to imagine themselves there.Consider using more descriptive adjectives and metaphors to paint a clearer picture of your room. This will make your writing more expressive and engaging."
考虑使用更多描述性的形容词和隐喻，来更清晰地描绘你的房间。这会让你的写作更加富有表现力和吸引力。关于你房间的作文生动有趣。你对周围环境的描述非常详细，让读者很容易就能想象出那里的样子。
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