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一觉醒来，发现双十一，除了各个商家的价格战，还有被刷屏的“蛋挞”图，外表金黄酥脆，内心甜蜜软糯。鸭梨山大砸下来的时候，第一个碎掉的小可爱，就是“蛋挞人”。

每每被问到双十一买啥了，老师们都是有气无力地回答：买啥呀，公开课、复习课、督导课，光忙着准备课了，哪有力气买买买？如果要选一个课型来上公开课，你会变成什么类型的蛋挞人？

阅读课：经典蛋挞（小case啦）  

词汇课：黑糖珍珠蛋挞（腹黑型）

听力课：麻薯蛋挞（软弹型）   

写作课：葡式蛋挞（焦虑型）

脑洞的社群当中经常听到有老师们会说：阅读课、词汇课、语法课、听力课作为公开课，可以参考大量的资源，但一听说要上写作课，特别是读后续写的课，就会压力山大。

焦虑的葡式蛋挞，怎么蜕变成开心果蛋挞？也许，你要来看看咱们脑洞vip的磨课服务。

上考题

当有一天，要外出赛课的你，抽到了如下的内容。学情未知，流程未知，该如何脱颖而出呢？你又会给出怎么样的设计？

Last Saturday, David was taking a walk in the park near his home when he noticed a woman with a boy who is about eight years old. When David passed them, he heard the woman yell, "How stupid you are! You're good at nothing." David stopped and looked at the little boy. The boy said nothing. He just stood there, looking upset.

David was reminded of his English teacher Mrs. Brown in middle school. After he entered middle school, David lacked self-confidence because he was often made fun of by others. He was often told that he was good at nothing, which David believed. But one day it all changed.        

One day, in an English writing class, Mrs. Brown asked them to read a novel. They were asked to write a new chapter of the novel after they finished reading it. A few days later, David handed in his story. He didn't give it much thought. But the next day, to his surprise, the comment "well done" from Mrs. Brown came into view the moment he turned to the page where the story was written.

When David read that, he almost burst into tears. He never expected to be praised one day. He suddenly gained some self-confidence. That day after he returned home, he wrote a short story and gave it to Mrs. Brown the next morning. And again he was praised.

David became very interested in writing. He often wrote short stories and asked Mrs. Brown to read and correct them for him. Mrs. Brown always corrected the mistakes he had made and gave him good advice to improve them. One year later, David joined the school newspaper and became an editor of it. He was no longer that boy who lacked self-confidence. He gained his confidence and was hopeful about his future.

He succeeded in entering college and kept writing. Several years after graduating from college, he had his first book published. With some more books coming out, he became famous as a writer in his country. And he owed his success to Mrs. Brown’s encouragement. Without her encouragement, his life might be very different now.

注意：

1. 续写词数应为150左右；

2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Inspired by his own life story, David decided to do something for that boy. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

 The mother was ashamed when she heard that. _______________________________________________________________________

脑洞为您支招

不确定的学情， 仅有短暂的交流时间，拿到的又是这样体现人物成长和内心冲突的读后续写课，如何上出彩？

咱们先来脑暴一下，你是不是也想到了5w1h的表格安排学生进行故事山的梳理。最后在小组的交流当中来进行情节的构思？

那么恭喜你，这也是大家都能想到的普通级做法，难怪经典蛋挞会变成焦虑型蛋挞了。

以下为磨课老师的初阶版本设计：

来看咱们的磨课导师怎么说，他们其中有的是赛课国奖获得者，有的是爱钻研的研究型老师，有的是有多年评委经验的骨干教师：

磨课导师还提供了读后续写评分量表和评分量表：

最重要的是，磨课从来不是只有意见打磨，还会有磨课老师的贴心工具包——独行者速，众行者远。当从每一个磨课老师那里拿到一块晶体，最后会产生怎么样的效果呢？下图中磨课导师提供了工具包：

以下是磨课老师的改进版本：

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以下是磨课后的精华总结，可以复制收藏哦：

读后续写的冲突设置包括人的自我挣扎，人和人的冲突，人与社会的抗争，人与自然的矛盾，人与神、技术等的冲突。

而围绕着上述冲突继续深挖，又可以具体到突破自我障碍、改变陋习、收获成长（人的自我挣扎）；

家庭关爱、关心他人、同伴竞争和合作、师生情谊（人与人的冲突，人与社会的抗争）；

关爱动物、人与自然和谐相处（人与自然的冲突）。

在挖掘冲突的建构模式上，要上读后续写公开课的老师们，可以寻找各种文本的共性，进而提炼出通用的写作模式。

懒得总结？那不妨来参考这一段来自于《千面英雄》的英雄之旅——

越来越大的压力，越来越多的任务，每一个脆弱的蛋挞人都有被压垮的脆弱时刻。好在总有一些可以同路的人，出出主意，唠唠嗑，哪怕只是鼓鼓劲，也能让蛋挞人在这个生活的大烤箱里，散发出独特的香甜气息。

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